"During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Quiot and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that employees will get adequate amounts of sleep."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author of the statement states that the Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than another nearby industry plant where workers' working hours is one less than Quiot Manufacturing. Moreover, due to more working hours there is a tendency of fatigue and sleep deprivation amongst workers. Hence, the author suggests that to decrease the quantity of on-the-job accidents at Quiot and to increase the productivity, three work shifts should be shorten by one hour so that employees would get enough rest. Although, the author has tried to provide the sufficent information on his/her side but has not provided any numeric data to strengthen his/her support. Also, the enviorment inside the factories is not discussed in the statement. Therefore, assumptions can be made that are discussed in the following essay.
Firstly, the author has not provided any information regarding what are the conditions of the industry. One might say the increased number of accidents are because there are not enough safety equipments adopted in the Quiot industry than Panoply. Moreover, it might be possible that workers in the Quiot are required to work with heavy machinery and company has not taken safety measurement steps so that lives of the workers can be saved. Henceforth, the details should be completely specified by the the author so that an answer could be found.
Secondly, the author has only mentioned the percentage difference in the number of accidents in the industries. The number of the workers employed in the company is not known. For example, if there are 100 workers in the Panoply Industries plant who met with on-the-job accidents last year, then the number of accidents in Quiot Industries is not more than 130 workers. In that case both of the industries might want to take actions regarding this issue. But if the number of workers are in thousands then the difference would not be that much big. Therefore, by not providing quantifiability of the workers in the field it is difficult to stand correct at the statement of the author.
Thrirdly, author has not mentioned when was the last time when the equipments were changed in both of the industries. Also, there is also no details regarding whether workers are trained for the jobs that they are doing. If any of the requirements are not fulfilled by the workers of the Quiot industries then it might also lead to the answer to why number of accidents are increasing. As the author has only focused the statement on the working hours the other factors might get missed. Therefore, unless those factors are not addressed it might not be possible to reach the answer.
Lastly, it might be possible that the concern put up by the author is true and stand correct till a certain level but the author has not given much attention to detail
related to the conditions of the industry that might lead to the solution of the problem.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 492 350
No. of Characters: 2377 1500
No. of Different Words: 204 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.71 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.831 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.614 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 166 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 132 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 65 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.364 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.068 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.773 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.521 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 465, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'shortened'?
Suggestion: shortened
...oductivity, three work shifts should be shorten by one hour so that employees would get...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 499, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...tails should be completely specified by the the author so that an answer could be found...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 499, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...tails should be completely specified by the the author so that an answer could be found...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 206, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...not known. For example, if there are 100 workers in the Panoply Industries plant ...
^^
Line 7, column 387, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...why number of accidents are increasing. As the author has only focused the stateme...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, lastly, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2438.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 490.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97551020408 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69765968266 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.416326530612 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 738.0 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.1087804395 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.818181818 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2727272727 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31818181818 5.70786347227 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243755207954 0.218282227539 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0707486592601 0.0743258471296 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115055381367 0.0701772020484 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114323478346 0.128457276422 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10304472144 0.0628817314937 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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