Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author claims that there has been decrease in students who are getting jobs after passing out from Omega University. The author arrives at this claim due to several evidences; the process of student evaluation of professors, increase in academic grades. Also, author believe that employers consider this dramatic rise in grades is inflated. However, before author’s argument are accounted for fact presented in argument, some more evidences must also be considered.
To begin with, how are we comparing students who are getting jobs from both universities? Are we comparing number of students or percentage of students who are receiving job offers from both Alpha and Omega universities? It may happen that, Alpha has more number of students in contrast to Omega university. Let’s say Omega has 250 students and number of students are getting jobs are 200. On the other hand, Alpha has 1000 students and number of students who are getting jobs after passing out is 500. When we compare numbers it is clear that, the number of students getting job after passing out from Alpha is more. However, when we compare percentage of students, at Omega eighty percent of student secure jobs, when compared to just fifty percent at Alpha. If above is true, author’s argument that students at Alpha are getting more jobs does not hold water.
In addition to this, are employers just looking at grades and hiring students? Or are they looking for a particular skill while employing? For instance, there is a heavy demand of Data Analysis in market. Now computer course which is being offered by Omega university does not include data analytics. On the contrary, computer course which is being offered by Alpha university does include introduction of data analytics. So, when students after passing out from Alpha university have an added advantage during interviews to secure a job. If above evidence is correct then, the author’s conclusion of student is not receiving job offers due to student evaluating professors is weakened.
Finally, are we comparing jobs between two different fields? For instance, Alpha university students are graduating in robotics engineering and students from Omega university are graduating in civil engineering. Also, the number of jobs available in market for robotics are more and less for civil engineers. Conspicuously, the students of robotics will have better chance in securing jobs than civil engineers. If we consider this case then author’s argument is negated.
To recapitulate, the author presents a flawed argument and has failed to consider specific evidences for his claim. Had he provided more evidences as mentioned above, his argument would have been more persuasive. As it remains, the author’s argument is too weak to be true. Hence, I remain unconvinced.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 28 15
No. of Words: 451 350
No. of Characters: 2290 1500
No. of Different Words: 193 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.608 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.078 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.602 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 175 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 141 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 105 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.107 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.538 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.643 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.314 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.468 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.214 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 412, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, hence, however, if, look, may, so, then, while, for instance, in addition, in contrast, in contrast to, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 19.6327345309 178% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2372.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 451.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25942350333 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73856476512 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.445676274945 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 755.1 705.55239521 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.70958083832 332% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 19.7664670659 142% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.972159701 57.8364921388 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.7142857143 119.503703932 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1071428571 23.324526521 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.70786347227 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178709974514 0.218282227539 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0605263847364 0.0743258471296 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576842415713 0.0701772020484 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101603566533 0.128457276422 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052399176709 0.0628817314937 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.93 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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