Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The arguer claims that Omega University are supposed to terminate student evaluation of professors so that the graduates can have better performances while hunting jobs. Though this argument makes sense in some circumstances, it fails to provide several convincing evidences.
Firstly, the evidence which is needed to evaluate is that the difference between the past and currency is not significant. Since there has been plentiful changes in not only education fields but also in workplace over fifteen years, the hiring requirements would be replaced by evaluating multiple aspects of the candidates nowadays. Therefore, the potential employers will no longer take the grades into account, on the contrary, they might consider aspects that are more practical, such as personal innovations or projects, previous experiences in related fields and so on.
Secondly, the potential employers fail to give us the evidence that the employers consider the grades of the graduates as the first element in hiring tyros. It is true that the grades can give a brief introduction about ones’ learning ability, while it cannot cloak the weak points of the individuals, such as communication ability, quark characteristics and improper manners. There is a great possibility that a graduate with lower scores performs better in the interview because of his outstanding presentation skills, leaving quantities of graduates with higher grades behind. If the Human Resources departments in the firms take the graduates’ grades at first place instead of their working abilities which matches the hiring requirements, then we can draw a conclusion that the students in Omega University have been adversely affected by their grades when finding jobs.
Lastly, even though assessment of the employers is grade-oriented, another evidence needed is that the grading system in Omega University has only one formula which gives the considerable proportion in students’ grades in the class, while remains a little part for their after-class performances. That is to say, the advantages of those students with rich experience in clubs or volunteer activities cannot be shown in their grades, then the potential employers are less likely to learn about their performances when looking at their scores. In addition, the argument assumes that the university does not provide endorsements for the graduates who are seeking jobs. With some credentials from the university, the students can also convince the employers by showing related skills, hence they are more suitable for the jobs than other competitors.
To sum up, without ruling out these evidences, the argument is so unwarranted that cannot convince us.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 414 350
No. of Characters: 2223 1500
No. of Different Words: 227 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.511 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.37 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.874 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 171 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 134 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 101 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 69 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.571 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.679 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.857 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.344 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.609 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.112 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 313, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, lastly, look, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, in addition, such as, it is true, on the contrary, to sum up, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2286.0 2260.96107784 101% => OK
No of words: 414.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52173913043 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97062170924 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 204.123752495 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553140096618 0.468620217663 118% => OK
syllable_count: 702.0 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.2536600538 57.8364921388 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 163.285714286 119.503703932 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5714285714 23.324526521 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.4285714286 5.70786347227 218% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223863775294 0.218282227539 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0691059343326 0.0743258471296 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.075726710897 0.0701772020484 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109570263138 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0722875325099 0.0628817314937 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.4 14.3799401198 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 48.3550499002 69% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.33 12.5979740519 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.65 8.32208582834 116% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 98.500998004 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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