Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
Omega University had implemented evaluation of teaching effectiveness of professors by students. Meanwhile, there is a dramatic increase in the student grade average at the university. The author claims that there is a direct relationship between the both. It is also stated that the equation is reflected in the placement scenario. It is overtly mentioned that the graduates have failen in landing succesful jobs in comparison to the nighbouring colleges. It is predicted that the solution for the crisis in the college is the termination of student evaluation of professors. However the prediction is contignent upo certain questions which must be answered to properly measure the vailidity of the argument.
First, higher Average Marks can be an influence of several other factors. There is a possibility of more resources being provided recently to the students. Better resources like new Central Library with studying friendly environment, better internet connection or advancement in practical technologies. A recent inspirational talk might have inspired the students to study more. There is a possibility of the change in curriculum. The author should clearly avert that no recent change in the curriculum or infrastructure in the college has occurred and if there is, then it should be mentioned with thier impact on the students.
Furthermore it is mentioned that the students of the nearby Alpha university have secured better jobs than the students of Omega University. This doesnt imply the impact of new procedure of student evaluation of professors. A comparison of the placement scenario between both the colleges before the implementation of the new procedure is important to detemine the correlation of the securing jobs and the quality of education. If Alpha University has always been a better ranked university, it is obvious that the graduates in that particular university would secure better jobs. Author should provide more comparison between before and after the implementation of the new procedure.
Finally, there is a paucity of quantitative analysis. It is not baldly stated or calculated the change in job opportunities. Also probably a survey from the students and teachers about their view would have strengthen the argument. Hence, author is requested to include more statistics before coming to any conclusion because without proof every statement can be considered as an assumption.
In conclusion, despite the reduction in placement opportunities for the graduates with the dramatic rise of 30 percent in overall student average grade, the prediction based on the assumption given is rife with unwarranted assumptionsand open to the questionsstated above that must be answered satisfactorily to prove the plausibility of such presentments.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 15 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 427 350
No. of Characters: 2314 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.546 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.419 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.142 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 188 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 151 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 117 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 83 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.565 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.69 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.435 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.289 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.489 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.04 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 458, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...comparison to the nighbouring colleges. It is predicted that the solution for the ...
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Line 1, column 578, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...on of student evaluation of professors. However the prediction is contignent upo certai...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...d with thier impact on the students. Furthermore it is mentioned that the students of th...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 147, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... the students of Omega University. This doesnt imply the impact of new procedure of st...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 126, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ulated the change in job opportunities. Also probably a survey from the students and...
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Line 9, column 208, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'strengthened'.
Suggestion: strengthened
...nd teachers about their view would have strengthen the argument. Hence, author is requeste...
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Line 9, column 259, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the argument. Hence, author is requested to include more statistics before coming...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, then, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 16.3942115768 152% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2366.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 427.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.54098360656 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21833715738 2.78398813304 116% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 204.123752495 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498829039813 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 765.9 705.55239521 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 65.2385183171 57.8364921388 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.869565217 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5652173913 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.69565217391 5.70786347227 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223911985264 0.218282227539 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0611582725738 0.0743258471296 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0833580169896 0.0701772020484 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111913929348 0.128457276422 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0676446173756 0.0628817314937 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 48.3550499002 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.85 12.5979740519 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 98.500998004 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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