Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument stresses on terminating a procedure—student evaluation of professor—in Omega University. The author of the argument believe that professor are assigning high grades to such extent that potential employers are considering those grades as being inflated and consequently, the Omega University graduates have not been as successful as the graduates of Alpha University at getting job. Hence, the author concludes that the termination of the evaluation procedure will help the Omega University graduate to secure better job. However, the argument consist many fallacies that prevent it from being a truly compelling argument.
In the first place, the author of the argument wrong-headedly assumes that the rise in the students’ grade is due to the evaluation procedure. The author does not provide further information to support his assumption. It is possible that because of the evaluation procedure, professor might have implemented effective teaching techniques to improve their performance and which might have resulted in increased grades. If it were true, the author’s conclusion would suffer the most.
In the second place, no information is given about the nearby Alpha University. Yet, the author is comparing the graduate students of Omega University with the graduates of Alpha. It may be true that Alpha University is one of the top ranked Universities in the town and more reputed than Omega University. In such a scenario, it is normal that Alpha graduates may be in demand more than Omega graduates.
In the final words, the author believes that terminating the evaluation procedure would enable student to secure better job. Such a inference is ridiculous, to produce more competent students, every university should focus on the efficacy of the teachers. If there is no evaluation of teacher, there is no guarantee that student get quality education. It is evident that such a termination would make Omega University even worse. Thus, the argument is premised on dubious assumption that resulted in a poor conclusion which is less likely to be true without providing enough evidences.
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Essay evaluation report
Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:
To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 332 350
No. of Characters: 1744 1500
No. of Different Words: 155 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.269 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.253 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.868 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.529 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.023 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.352 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.538 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.069 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 131, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...able student to secure better job. Such a inference is ridiculous, to produce mor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, hence, however, if, may, second, so, thus, in the first place, in the second place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1800.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 330.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45454545455 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11248559432 2.78398813304 112% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493939393939 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 590.4 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.4550226486 57.8364921388 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.882352941 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4117647059 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05882352941 5.70786347227 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233455339962 0.218282227539 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769705674532 0.0743258471296 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0687295536805 0.0701772020484 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14119392399 0.128457276422 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0414785293757 0.0628817314937 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 48.3550499002 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.5979740519 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 12.3882235529 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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