Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
While the decrement in the quality of education of education due to the now policy that allows the students to evaluate their professors, the argument doesn't provide a cogent for the graduates being less successful at getting jobs compared to the other institute. It is easy to understand that the university wants to terminate the student evaluation of professor, but the argument is rife with holes and assumptions that it is less likely to persuade the reader.
The author has assumed that the student grade averages have increased by 30 percent after the colleges have implemented the new policy. To arrive at this result assumed that the professors have leniently started giving good grades to the student in order to get a good evaluation from them. It is equally likely that after implementation of the new policy, the professors, since they are being evaluated, have started putting in more effort in teaching the students. This may have increase the overll grades of the students. The question on the professors' integrity by the author is bit too extereme.
The author has not mentioned the time when the professor evalution by the students is carried out. If the evaluation is done before the stuents recieve their final grades, it is very unlikely that the students' grades have affected the professor evaluation. Talking in terms of cause-effect, the cause here is the implementation of the new policy and the effect is the increament in grades. Since the time of the professor evaluation is not mentioned, there is no way to know whether these two factors have a cause effect relation between them. The cause always preceds the effect and not the other way around. The author has assumed that the done is necessarily after the final grades are announced.
Building upont he implication that the discountinuation of the professor evalution process, the author has not explained how this change will help the students at Omega university to secure jobs. The imformation about the employment rate before the professor evaluation was implemented is missing. The author has assumed that the employment rate higher before the new policy came into practice. It is equally likely that the employment rate were the same even before the new policy was implemented and the new policy may not have any significant effect on the employment rate.
A stable, valid feedback system on both side plays a vital role in any educational institute. However, the author argument to remove the professor evaluation system is hollow and not likely to convince the reader. The modified argument should give the appropiate time period at which the evaluation was done, should provide the data representing the situation before the new policy was implemented. With the added points it may sound more convincing.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 461 350
No. of Characters: 2300 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.634 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.989 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.692 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 175 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 90 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.952 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.829 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.333 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.337 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.552 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.151 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 36, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'of education'.
Suggestion: of education
While the decrement in the quality of education of education due to the now policy that allows the s...
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Line 1, column 152, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...evaluate their professors, the argument doesnt provide a cogent for the graduates bein...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 249, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ted giving good grades to the student in order to get a good evaluation from them...
^^
Line 3, column 547, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'professors'' or 'professor's'?
Suggestion: professors'; professor's
...es of the students. The question on the professors integrity by the author is bit too exte...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 585, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'bitten'.
Suggestion: bitten
...e professors integrity by the author is bit too extereme. The author has not m...
^^^
Line 10, column 452, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed points it may sound more convincing.
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 30.0 16.3942115768 183% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2351.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 460.0 441.139720559 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11086956522 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76178605124 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.441304347826 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 762.3 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.9192307689 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.952380952 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9047619048 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.52380952381 5.70786347227 27% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288418296818 0.218282227539 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0828814030323 0.0743258471296 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0474640819665 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150062801131 0.128457276422 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0579964532168 0.0628817314937 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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