Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
Education is a backbone of a nation and a student's future is depended on how effectively he has gained knowledge. In the passage, it is depicted that students of Omega University evaluate the dexterity of all professors and from then the grades of students risen by 30 percent, but they did not get jobs commensurate with their results. Author's analyzed the matter and found out the reason behind this which was professors assigned them good marks so that pupils did not evaluate him negatively. However, there is not enough information to claim author's finding is correct, so I do not corroborate with author's opinion.
As There is no proof that students did not give any bad remarks to the teacher, so we could not come to any conclusion hasty. It might be coincidence that these occurrences happened in the same time. Though it is not mentioned, students might be work hard and they developed their skills and by their effort they had achieved brilliant marks. In addition to this, during the first year of my varsity life I was not focused in my studies and also surrounded with so many problems, but after a certain time I was dedicated to my learning and obtained good marks also scholarships.
Or, there is another possibility that teacher could be timid after knowing the evaluation process so they taught very meticulously and did not try to circumvent their jobs. They could be frightened of losing their jobs and for this reason they taught them efficiently. In my academic period, there was a teacher who did not teach in the class properly and try to make the students penchant towards his tuition so that he can earn extra money. Since our school starts the evaluation process, then he was quite alert and gave his full effort to teach us and was very humble to us. Because of this, we studied attentively and our marks was also higher that time.
Besides, it is also not manifested that reason behind for not acquiring jobs was the excellent grades without their merit. While there is no proper elaboration to compare Omega university to Alpha university, may be the number of Alpha university students were more than omega university student and because of this the rate of getting jobs of Alpha students were much more than omega students.
At the end, I want to concede that, author's argument is based upon some faulty assumptions and to prove his thesis valid he has to gather abundant details and facts. Indeed, without those informations and clarity I discord with author's point of view.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 433 350
No. of Characters: 2044 1500
No. of Different Words: 224 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.562 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.721 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.538 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 136 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.471 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.641 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.647 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.298 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.298 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.144 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 622, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o not corroborate with authors opinion. As There is no proof that students did n...
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Line 3, column 372, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
... the class properly and try to make the students penchant towards his tuition so that he...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, may, so, then, while, as to, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 28.8173652695 198% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2082.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 433.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80831408776 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58304357249 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519630484988 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 654.3 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3040906015 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.470588235 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4705882353 23.324526521 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.70588235294 5.70786347227 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20779071712 0.218282227539 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.060830194531 0.0743258471296 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587240386525 0.0701772020484 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109360244562 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0671578581601 0.0628817314937 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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