Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In the argument, the author concludes that students’ evaluation on professors should be discontinued. To reinforce the conclusion, the author points out the employers’ unwillingness to hire omega university’s students and the students’ less success of omega university compared with that of alpha university. however, more specific evidence is needed to better evaluate the conclusion.
The author indicates that it’s the evaluation system that contributes to the improvement of students’ grades. however, it’s perfunctory to assume that rise of scores is definitely explained by the implement of evaluation process. In all likelihood, student’s academic ability might actually be enhanced dramatically due to the professors’ hard-working, leading to their better performance in the examination. Besides, there is possibility that the tests in the university all over the country became so easy that every student, even bottom-level one, could make giant progress concerning their grades. More detailed information about the student’s actual academic capability as well as the difficulty of final exams should be provided to authenticate the causal-and-effect relationship.
On the ground of the fact that the omega’s graduates don’t acquire fancy jobs, the author unfairly assumes that potential employers’ dissatisfaction on their inflated grades have everything to do with their loss. however, some convincing testimony of graduates’ actual ability and the omega university’s reputation is supposed to be put forward to vindicate the assumption. chances are high that omega university is so focused on students’ academic performance that it ignores to cultivate student’s practical ability as well as communication skills, which are highlighted by the potential company and employers in the interview. What’s worse, the fame and reputation of omega university might decline significantly during these years, resulting in company’s inevitable doubt on graduates’ ability and unwillingness to hire them.
Based on the phenomena that alpha’s graduates get more successful jobs than omega’s students do, the author makes an cursory assumption that omega’s students experience terrible failure in finding jobs. Nonetheless, it’s probable that alpha is a recognized top university in the country while omega is considered as a low-ranking school, as a result of which, employers are much more inclined to provide alpha’s graduates with more opportunities of work. even though the giant gap is nonexistent, we could not ignore the possibility that omega and alpha are two colleges focusing on totally different areas. students in omega mostly major in art field such as choreography while the majority of graduates in alpha study computer science as well as networking security, engendering an inevitable difference in profession prospects and chances. Therefore, the author should offer more proof of the difference between alpha university and omega university to validate the assumption.
To sum up, the author’s conclusion on terminating students’ evaluation does not hold water. More credence is expected to be provided.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 462 350
No. of Characters: 2605 1500
No. of Different Words: 231 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.636 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.639 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.113 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 205 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 174 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 139 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 101 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.8 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 20.282 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.354 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.603 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 330, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...compared with that of alpha university. however, more specific evidence is needed to be...
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Line 3, column 121, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...e improvement of students' grades. however, it's perfunctory to assume that r...
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Line 5, column 229, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
... have everything to do with their loss. however, some convincing testimony of graduates...
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Line 5, column 400, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Chances
...ut forward to vindicate the assumption. chances are high that omega university is so fo...
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Line 7, column 125, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ga's students do, the author makes an cursory assumption that omega's st...
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Line 7, column 481, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Even
...duates with more opportunities of work. even though the giant gap is nonexistent, we...
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Line 7, column 634, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Students
...es focusing on totally different areas. students in omega mostly major in art field such...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...niversity to validate the assumption. To sum up, the author's conclusion ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, but, however, if, nonetheless, so, then, therefore, well, while, such as, as a result, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2810.0 2260.96107784 124% => OK
No of words: 461.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 6.09544468547 5.12650576532 119% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.60179926794 2.78398813304 129% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 204.123752495 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520607375271 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 906.3 705.55239521 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.0 1.59920159681 125% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.9970958126 57.8364921388 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.894736842 119.503703932 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2631578947 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.68421052632 5.70786347227 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174908058475 0.218282227539 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0711060351224 0.0743258471296 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0350988716752 0.0701772020484 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114261547858 0.128457276422 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.037625967931 0.0628817314937 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.4 14.3799401198 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 13.28 48.3550499002 27% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.1628742515 204% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.4 12.197005988 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 18.4 12.5979740519 146% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.66 8.32208582834 116% => OK
difficult_words: 141.0 98.500998004 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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