3. Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The author mentions that students should be persuaded by educational institutions to draw away from fields which they are unlikely to make success. However, I disagree with the point since the author overly simplifies the difficulty to predict the success and the psychological harm to students once they are kept away from fields they are passionate about.
We could not deny the fact that the pursuit of unsuitable areas sometimes would bring people failure along with giant pressure. For example, Mark Twain, the worldwide famous writer, once was stubborn in being a publisher and setting up his own company, only to end up with being stuck in poverty. Likewise, Tao Yuanming, a Chinese poet featured romantic and relaxing poems, was persisted in serving as an official while he was too kind and straight to put up with the darkness of officialdom, consequently leading to his extreme disappointment and insulation from the world. As a result, students who choose those aspects that they have little chance to be successful would take numerous risks and it’s inevitable for educational institutions such as their schools to feel responsible to keep them away from those obstacles.
However, it’s virtually impossible for educational institutions to exactly predict whether they would succeed in their fields. The pace of modern society is so rapid that prospects of profession changes very fast, making it almost impossible to forecast the future of a field. The subject concerning economy as well as business used to be the priority of talented students while it now faces with the challenges of saturation and also the market is not as prosperous as it used to be. computer science, especially artificial intelligence, was once considered as the impractical imagination and researches in this area were thought to end up with nothing but crazy dreams. but now could anyone ignore the huge success of various computer companies and the incredible influence brought by the machine learning? taking all these trends into consideration, it’s unrealistic for educational institutions to know if their students would make success in their areas.
Even though they are aware of the field’s unpromising future, it would be improper to dissuade them from fields which they have passion on. In all likelihood, the crucial deprivation of their rights to pursue dreams would engender unimaginable mental harm, resulting in their severe rebellion and their final failure. numerous kids, who always are interested in art, sports and so on, have to be forced to major in electric engineer or laws since their parents and schools consider those popular majors would be shortcuts to receive not only fame but also fortune. As a result, many of kids experience not a bit joy but endless pain to study, which could explain their self-indulgence in video games or worse.
To sum up, the disadvantages of educational institutions’ prevention on students’ pursuit overwhelm the advantages
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put between 'would' and 'bring'.
Suggestion: would sometimes bring
...ct that the pursuit of unsuitable areas sometimes would bring people failure along with giant pressur...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...o end up with nothing but crazy dreams. but now could anyone ignore the huge succes...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Taking
...luence brought by the machine learning? taking all these trends into consideration, it...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Numerous
...vere rebellion and their final failure. numerous kids, who always are interested in art,...
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Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'are'.
Suggestion: are always
...their final failure. numerous kids, who always are interested in art, sports and so on, ha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, likewise, so, well, while, as to, for example, such as, as a result, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2536.0 2235.4752809 113% => OK
No of words: 477.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31656184486 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96351833462 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 215.323595506 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570230607966 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 783.9 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.1340007019 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.176470588 118.986275619 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0588235294 23.4991977007 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.52941176471 5.21951772744 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207466347079 0.243740707755 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0694871322373 0.0831039109588 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0716553277069 0.0758088955206 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121618580277 0.150359130593 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0609036933781 0.0667264976115 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 14.1392134831 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.8420337079 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 100.480337079 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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