Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
Student evaluation of professors should be a one-one interaction between the students and the professor who teaches them instead of being a metric to measure the professor's performance. When the professors are judged by the students and when the professor's future depends on what the student feel about him then definitely he/she will try to manipulate the students by giving them high grades, by being too flexible instead of being professional and so on. The student's mindset would also be like if any professor is being stringent towards them they will give him bad review. These kind of scenarios are detrimental students and both teachers.
Also as mentioned in the argument the reason for assigning higher grades may not be due to student evaluation of the professors. The students of present generation may be brighter than the students fifteen yeats ago or the other could be the student evaluation process did really work effectively and the professors based on the reviews they got might have increased their knowledge and providing what the students require. So the argument really failed to mention the exact reason for "why the professors started assigning higher grades ?"
The employers looking down upon the students grades at Omega University is not a plausible statement I believe. Beacuse any employer before recruiting freshers have some systematic procedure of testing "What the student have got rather than academics?" . Nowadays, the trend is like if the performnace of the student during the recruitment process is elegant then the student will be recruited without bothering about his academic performance. So the statement that saying employers look down upon student grades at Omega university and as a result the students failed to get jobs is not a valid statement.
The argument failed to link between the student evaluation process and students failing to getting jobs. So we cannot really consider student evaluation process is the reason for students failing on recruitments. There may be any other flaws like lack of good curriculum etc., which the argument failed to mention. Also comparing the students students of Omega university with students of Alpha university is not at all a correct thing to do. Because the Alpha University may be of high ranking compared to Omega University and so the students of Alpha University are naturally more intellectual than students of Omega university. This arises a question of "On what basis the comparison is done between the Omega University and Alpha Univeristy ?". Any point in the argument doesn't explain this question so that we can consider the comparison is invalid.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 428 350
No. of Characters: 2191 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.548 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.119 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.746 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 172 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 142 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 96 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 63 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.778 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.612 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.722 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.373 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.553 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.18 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 163, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'professors'' or 'professor's'?
Suggestion: professors'; professor's
...nstead of being a metric to measure the professors performance. When the professors are ju...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 462, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...ad of being professional and so on. The students mindset would also be like if any profe...
^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 578, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'These kinds'?
Suggestion: This kind; These kinds
...rds them they will give him bad review. These kind of scenarios are detrimental students a...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...trimental students and both teachers. Also as mentioned in the argument the reason...
^^^^
Line 5, column 263, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...nt have got rather than academics?' . Nowadays, the trend is like if the perf...
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Line 7, column 316, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
..., which the argument failed to mention. Also comparing the students students of Omeg...
^^^^
Line 7, column 335, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: students
...t failed to mention. Also comparing the students students of Omega university with students of Al...
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Line 7, column 786, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...isty ?'. Any point in the argument doesnt explain this question so that we can co...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, may, really, so, then, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2258.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 428.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27570093458 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82297759726 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46261682243 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 707.4 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.574384644 57.8364921388 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.823529412 119.503703932 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1764705882 23.324526521 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47058823529 5.70786347227 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255104127054 0.218282227539 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0950823020037 0.0743258471296 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0618713354321 0.0701772020484 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165492848106 0.128457276422 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0441605756122 0.0628817314937 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.3550499002 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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