Fifteen years ago Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors Since that time Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes and overall student | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

The author argues that Omega University should abandon the current student evaluation of professors. This is based on the premises that since the implementation of professors’ evaluation the students’ grades have risen and the graduates of Omega University facing difficulties to get a successful job in comparison with the respective graduates from Alpha University, as the employers contend that these augmented grades are plasmatic. However, on deeper analysis, it is apparent that certain relevant aspects have not been taken into consideration leading to a number of mistaken assumption and logical flaws.
One such flaw is the assumption that professors assign higher grades in Omega University in order to gain a better evaluation of the students. Though, It is possible the augment in the students’ grades reflect the positive impact of the task of evaluation of the professors, getting them better at their courses, being more consistent and productive. Thus, this has a direct impact on the performances of the students reflecting on the higher grades. To strengthen his/her argument, the author should cite reports and censures from students who condemned a change of behavior of professors since the implementation of their evaluation.
Moreover, the author is incorrectly based on the assumption that the employers prefer the graduates from Alpha University due to the inflated grades of students from Omega University. However, a possible explanation is that generally Alpha University has more prestige and its graduates are desire assets for each company. To overcome this flaw, the author should cite a evaluation of Universities which would demonstrate that Omega University is ranked constantly higher than Alpha University.
After closer examination of the passage presented, it is apparent that there are several logical flaws. The recommendations in the essay show how the argument may be strengthened and made more logically sound.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, moreover, so, then, thus

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1667.0 2260.96107784 74% => OK
No of words: 299.0 441.139720559 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.57525083612 5.12650576532 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09495588265 2.78398813304 111% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 204.123752495 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515050167224 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 705.55239521 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.3740695726 57.8364921388 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.916666667 119.503703932 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9166666667 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.70786347227 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.308913994058 0.218282227539 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111867193397 0.0743258471296 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0830675721886 0.0701772020484 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174592918596 0.128457276422 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117099321386 0.0628817314937 186% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 14.3799401198 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 48.3550499002 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.197005988 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.38 12.5979740519 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.37 8.32208582834 113% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, moreover, so, then, thus

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