The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
“Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field’s conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures.”
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author of the satement claims that the survey which was done by Dr. Krap could not be true and provide some evidences and reasons. At the first galnce it looks persuasive but when scrutinize the statement, there are rife of holes and assumptions and if one of them fails, the argument would be on doubt.
The first assumption of the arguments is that the society in the island was completely constant during past year. While the study of the Dr. Krap was done about twenty years ago, author examine the society right now. During past twenty years lots of evidences happened and may affect on the living style of the natives. For example, technological improvement strongly changed life style and point of view of individuals or economical change may effect on their life while the autho does not mention any evidance to eliminate these posibilities. In order to sterengthen the argument, the writer could present any historical evidances which show the life style of inhabitants are similar to the period with initial survey.
Another hole in the argument is about recet interview which hold by author. He does not provide any information about method of his study and number of people which interviewed. There are a number of potential errors in his study such as insufficient number of studying, the answer choices may be narrowed to some that are desireable for interviwers, and there is not any statistical result to distinguish cogency of the study. To support the survey, the author should present additional information about the survey to convince the reader.
Finally, even the survey which hold by the writer would be reliable and the life style of island would be same as twenty years ago, the reason that auther mentions for refuting Dr. Kolen is not reasonable. He maintains, since children talk more about thier biloloogical parents more than any other persons, the conclusion of initial study is wrong. Whereas we can count number of potential reasons for this event. For instance, children maybe miss their parents and they want to talk about them or because lake of visiting the try to satisfy their feeling or any psychological reasons. To prove the argument from other posibilities, the writer could provide some experts' idea about this bahavior of children.
In conclusion, the argument present an statements but could not provide sufficent premises to support it and it is necessary to propose any additional information to improve cogency of the argument.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 412 350
No. of Characters: 2034 1500
No. of Different Words: 201 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.505 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.937 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.571 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 143 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.235 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.524 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.332 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.555 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.148 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 278, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...ears lots of evidences happened and may affect on the living style of the natives. For ex...
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Line 3, column 424, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
...yle and point of view of individuals or economical change may effect on their life while t...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 446, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...of individuals or economical change may effect on their life while the autho does not ...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 664, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'experts'' or 'expert's'?
Suggestion: experts'; expert's
...bilities, the writer could provide some experts idea about this bahavior of children. ...
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Line 9, column 37, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
.... In conclusion, the argument present an statements but could not provide suffic...
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Line 9, column 37, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an statement' or simply 'statements'?
Suggestion: an statement; statements
.... In conclusion, the argument present an statements but could not provide sufficent premise...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, look, may, so, then, whereas, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2081.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 412.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05097087379 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65029427811 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495145631068 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8124779563 57.8364921388 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.411764706 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2352941176 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52941176471 5.70786347227 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0903517257908 0.218282227539 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0308765666365 0.0743258471296 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0325028881599 0.0701772020484 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0495050434055 0.128457276422 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0242046321903 0.0628817314937 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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