The following appeared in a health magazine published in Corpora.
"Medical experts say that only one-quarter of Corpora's citizens meet the current standards for adequate physical fitness, even though twenty years ago, one-half of all of Corpora's citizens met the standards as then defined. But these experts are mistaken when they suggest that spending too much time using computers has caused a decline in fitness. Since overall fitness levels are highest in regions of Corpora where levels of computer ownership are also highest, it is clear that using computers has not made citizens less physically fit. Instead, as shown by this year's unusually low expenditures on fitness-related products and services, the recent decline in the economy is most likely the cause, and fitness levels will improve when the economy does."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The argument, fitness will increase when economy improves, rely on vague and unwarranted assumption therefore, fitness will not increase when economy improves.
First, to pinpoint the cause of reduced fitness, author blames economy in worse shape, as a result people are not spending money on fitness-related product and services. However, it could be possible that people are working out at home and preparing a nutraceutical supplement at home by buying raw material. Also, the author states that the amount of money spent on the fitness-related product has reduced but doesn't provide any concrete number. The reduction of expenditure on fitness-related product and services could have been low in which case the argument is weakened.
Next, the author refutes the reasoning of health magazine and points out that computer ownership can't be the cause of reduction of fitness and cites the example of Corpora where a large number of people are fit and a large number of people own a computer. However, how this conclusion about computer ownership and fitness level was reached is unclear. Was there a survey they performed? If yes, then what was the sample size? Were the people in the sample were representative of the population or not? It is equally probable that even though a large number of people in Corpora owned a computer, they did not spend much time on it and are therefore fit, proving the prediction of medical experts right. This, in turn, undermines the author's argument that fitness will increase when the economy will flourish.
Third, the author already assumes that there are less number of people who are fit and has made this conjecture from the article in a health magazine. It is unclear what method was used by medical experts to reach the conclusion that only a quarter of the Corpora population meets current fitness standard in contrast on half of the population a decade ago. The fitness standard may have changed over the time and now must have become stringent thus, deeming a large number of people to be unfit. Moreover, it is obscure what methods were used by the medical experts to assess the fitness of Corpora population. It is likely that writer of health magazine ulterior motives to write such a number. Maybe he was bribed by the fitness industry to write such things and thus diverting people toward adopting a new lifestyle where fitness is of paramount importance. Since the number of people that are unfit is unclear in the first place, the argument that fitness will increase when the economy improves is unwarranted.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 429 350
No. of Characters: 2099 1500
No. of Different Words: 192 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.551 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.893 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.588 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 168 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 123 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.579 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.621 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.684 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.331 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.487 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.075 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 411, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...fitness-related product has reduced but doesnt provide any concrete number. The reduct...
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Line 3, column 98, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... and points out that computer ownership cant be the cause of reduction of fitness an...
^^^^
Line 3, column 179, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
... and cites the example of Corpora where a large number of people are fit and a large number of pe...
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Line 3, column 216, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...re a large number of people are fit and a large number of people own a computer. However, how thi...
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Line 3, column 542, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...It is equally probable that even though a large number of people in Corpora owned a computer, the...
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Line 3, column 733, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ts right. This, in turn, undermines the authors argument that fitness will increase whe...
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Line 4, column 459, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ust have become stringent thus, deeming a large number of people to be unfit. Moreover, it is obs...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, third, thus, in contrast, as a result, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2142.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 428.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0046728972 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64836216705 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476635514019 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 688.5 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.1063895029 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.736842105 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5263157895 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52631578947 5.70786347227 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0813964480851 0.218282227539 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0292288852919 0.0743258471296 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503949567173 0.0701772020484 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0454403746442 0.128457276422 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0440788593727 0.0628817314937 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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