The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine.
"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The argument of hiring the people who need less than six hours of sleep can contribute to the prosperity of company is based on vague and unwarranted assumption and is thus, fallacious. Therefore, hiring the people who need less than six hours of sleep will not lead to the prosperity of a company.
First, the argument relies on a study which states the association between number of hours needed for sleep and the success of company. It is unclear whether the result obtained throught the study were stastically significant enough to make strong co-relation between number of hours of sleep needed and the success of a firm. In case there was only weak association between sleep and success of company, the argument fails.
Second, it is being assumed that the Advertising Executives are the only personnel responsible for the success of company and not the quality of the product or any other people involved in developing the product tailored to the need of consumers. It is highly unlikely that only the advertisement can lead to the success of company and therefore, hiring the people the Advertisement Executives needing less than 6 hours of sleep will not have positive impact on the success of a company.
Thirf, it is being assumed that all the people have same physiology and those who sleep for less than 6 hours will always substantially contribute to the success of company. This sounds more counterintuitive. Different people need different amount of sleep. Some may need more and others may need less. Research has shown that atleast a six hours of sleep is needed for an individual to function optimally. Sleeping for less than six hours might therefore, contribute to failure of company rather than success. It might be that the subjects involved in the study took short naps in day time and thus, fulfilled their sleep quota by sleeping two times a day. Therefore, they needed less than six hours of sleep in the night. Since, it is not known whether the subjects involved in the study slept at the other times of the day, the results of the study needs to be taken with caution. Since there is uncertainity involved in the study and lacks thorough information about the sleeping pattern of the subjects involved, hiring people requiring less than six hours of sleep may prove counterproductive.
Finally, the article appears in the business magazine and it is obscure what was the motivation of the publisher behing publishng the result of this particular study. It might be possible that by publsihing such results they are trying to set up job seeker to lie that they need less than six hours of study and thus, make them word hard unnecessarily for the same wage. Since the motivation of publsher behind publishing this study are unclear,hiring people who need less than 6 hours of sleep is will not lead to prosperity and the growth of the company.
In conclusion, the hiring people needing less than six hours of study will not lead to success because the statistical significance of study is unclear, motivation behind publishing such study is obscure and no concrete information about the sleeping pattern of subjects involved in the study is known.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: It is unclear whether the result obtained throught the study were stastically significant enough to make strong co-relation between number of hours of sleep needed and the success of a firm.
Error: throught Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: co-relation Suggestion: correlation
Error: stastically Suggestion: statically
Sentence: Research has shown that atleast a six hours of sleep is needed for an individual to function optimally.
Error: atleast Suggestion: attest
Sentence: Since there is uncertainity involved in the study and lacks thorough information about the sleeping pattern of the subjects involved, hiring people requiring less than six hours of sleep may prove counterproductive.
Error: uncertainity Suggestion: uncertainty
Sentence: Finally, the article appears in the business magazine and it is obscure what was the motivation of the publisher behing publishng the result of this particular study.
Error: publishng Suggestion: publishing
Error: behing Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: It might be possible that by publsihing such results they are trying to set up job seeker to lie that they need less than six hours of study and thus, make them word hard unnecessarily for the same wage.
Error: publsihing Suggestion: publishing
Sentence: Since the motivation of publsher behind publishing this study are unclear,hiring people who need less than 6 hours of sleep is will not lead to prosperity and the growth of the company.
Error: publsher Suggestion: publisher
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 539 350
No. of Characters: 2595 1500
No. of Different Words: 194 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.818 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.814 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.631 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 171 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 130 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.793 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.619 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.4 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.6 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.172 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 527, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ny rather than success. It might be that the subjects involved in the study took ...
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Line 5, column 444, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , hiring
...behind publishing this study are unclear,hiring people who need less than 6 hours of sl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 55.5748502994 135% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2644.0 2260.96107784 117% => OK
No of words: 538.0 441.139720559 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91449814126 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81610080973 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7267676998 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.369888475836 0.468620217663 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 804.6 705.55239521 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.2362711628 57.8364921388 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.904761905 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.619047619 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.42857142857 5.70786347227 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207302106711 0.218282227539 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0864807041248 0.0743258471296 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0468870322276 0.0701772020484 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125394492883 0.128457276422 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0435283624908 0.0628817314937 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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