The following appeared in a health magazine.
"The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles. Their responses to a recent survey show that in their eating habits they conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago. Furthermore, there has been a fourfold increase in sales of food products containing kiran, a substance that a scientific study has shown reduces cholesterol. This trend is also evident in reduced sales of sulia, a food that few of the most healthy citizens regularly eat."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author has based the entire articles on results of a survey conducted. Now, firstly, we are not sure if the study was carried in all parts of Forsthye or just some specific spots. if the latter is the case, then considering it to be valid for entire city is not a recommendable approach. secondly, it has been inferred from the feedback that the eating habits of the citizens are aligned closely, with government’s nutritional advise, but the question is how closely? it there any an considerable gap? it could be fats, vitamin A and B consumption is as prescribed but the level of sodium in take on lower end by 20% and glucose supply is 10% above the threshold. The apparently, these seem to be slight deviations but how these will impact health, needs to be taken in account, Until detail data of survey is not shared, conclusion cannot be reached. Thirdly, how the survey questions have been designed? has questionnaire developed to cater layman? this very important to determine the effectiveness of the survey. if it contains questions such as ‘what is your weekly consumption of proteins?, a person with very limited biology knowledge might mistaken to believe the rice contains protein and may answer in that context.
To further back the argument, the writer informed the readers that a drastic increase in sales of has been observed in kiran. we understand kiran is good for reduction of cholesterol, but it the advisable intake has not been brought into the picture. secondly, how can we be too sure if the demand of kiran departmental store have increased, people have balance diet. it could be kiran is being eaten by limited group of people. Also, it may be possible that higher amount of kiran may lead to drop of cholesterol level resulting in detrimental effects.
Lastly, the writer has pointed to drop in sales of Sulia, but no information is shared how this can directly related to informed health of the residents.
limiting claim that Forsytle has healthy lifestyle to evidence of a survey, details of which are not available and to increase /decrease in demand of some product in a weak debate. we need to dig in deeper to understand the exact case.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1821.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 375.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.856 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79827756546 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562666666667 0.468620217663 120% => OK
syllable_count: 572.4 705.55239521 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.4947119866 57.8364921388 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.8421052632 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7368421053 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.63157894737 5.70786347227 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 17.0 5.25449101796 324% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0837250528925 0.218282227539 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0241076661299 0.0743258471296 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0343949639025 0.0701772020484 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0432112612413 0.128457276422 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326869726534 0.0628817314937 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 98.500998004 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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