The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex to its manager.
"One month ago, all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. I predict that modifying showerheads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the Sunnyside Towers complex will increase our profits even more dramatically."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The owner has written an encouraging note to the manager of the Sunnyside Towers (st) regarding the positive results being obtain by replacing head showers in three of the building. However, the argument is not cogent enough since it is rife hole and assumptions.
Firstly, the resident mentions that the change is resulting in decrease in water flow to the building thus reducing the overall wastage of the water. but here, the writer presumes the only source of waste of water were the old shower heads. he has not mentioned any detail regarding maintenance condition of water pipelines, leakage of which would serve primary source of the loss. plus, it is not mentioned if there are any fountains or ponds available for recreational purpose in the compound, since these would also be contributing to the wastage as well.
Secondly, the writer states that new head showers are effective, but he himself weakens his position but informing no data is currently available regarding the water usage before and post replacement. Until the exact readings are shared, it will be too abstract to believe the view.
Thirdly, to support the idea, the writer is also presenting the financial perspective but he has not shared any percentage increase in the profit. also, he not shared any insight on what is the billing system of st. it is not clear if the management charges lumpsum amount from occupants against all utilities or bills are paid based on individual usage. if latter is the case, then it will be missing piece of puzzle that how the change been favourable to profit made by st.
Fourthly, the dweller claims that only limited complaints were lodged against this and so these are negligible. but no details are shared regarding the number of complaints that been received and what exactly is the challenge being faced by others.
Lastly, the writer proposes the same changes must be implemented to other building of st. this point falls short mainly because the case details of the three building of st is not shared and plus no further supporting evidence is presented for remaining twelve building. We are not sure if the complaints would increase if the project is extended. will this increase profit would be considerable enough?
it might be true restricting water flow to three building might have some pros but before this idea could be considered as successful and same could be planned for the other buildings, the management must factor the above queries.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 ---not exactly. better to say: maybe it takes more time for people to shower.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 415 350
No. of Characters: 2014 1500
No. of Different Words: 209 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.513 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.853 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.529 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 147 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 37.727 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 24.29 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.909 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.349 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.773 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.111 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 151, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...ucing the overall wastage of the water. but here, the writer presumes the only sour...
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Line 4, column 242, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...ste of water were the old shower heads. he has not mentioned any detail regarding ...
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Line 4, column 383, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Plus
...would serve primary source of the loss. plus, it is not mentioned if there are any f...
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Line 10, column 148, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
... any percentage increase in the profit. also, he not shared any insight on what is t...
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Line 10, column 356, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...lls are paid based on individual usage. if latter is the case, then it will be mis...
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Line 13, column 113, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...ainst this and so these are negligible. but no details are shared regarding the num...
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Line 16, column 349, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Will
...ld increase if the project is extended. will this increase profit would be considera...
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Line 19, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...ofit would be considerable enough? it might be true restricting water flow to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, thus, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 19.6327345309 173% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2089.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 415.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03373493976 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58930659385 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527710843373 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 639.9 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.9199470955 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.947368421 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8421052632 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.94736842105 5.70786347227 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0991036997687 0.218282227539 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0280395424677 0.0743258471296 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0371968963892 0.0701772020484 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.048586657755 0.128457276422 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0338136450256 0.0628817314937 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 98.500998004 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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