The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
According to the letter, moped accidents would decrease if Balmer limit the number of mopeds rented. This argument may seem plausible at first glance. In order to examine this predition critically, however, we need to answer some questions regarding the reason of moped accidents, the reason of accident reduction in Torseau and the source of the moped in Balmer.
To begin with, more questions with regard to the reason of moped accidents in Balmer should be answered to decide whether this argument is justified. Is it the moped mainly caused the accident? It is prabable that most pedestrains in Balmer don't obey basic traffic laws. Under such circumstance, the number of accidents involving pedestrains will be large, even if the number of moped on the road is reduced. Without more information apropos of the reason of the moped accidents, the predition would be untenable.
Further more, we also need to ask that why the number of accidents reduced in Torseau. Could it actually be attributed to the limits on moped? The accident reduction doesn't necessarily imply that rental limitation is effective. Maybe at the same time, Torseau also attach more significance to educate the moped drivers and pedestrians, so as to arise their awareness of safety. Or perhaps, Torseau also enact a speed limit policy. With such regulation, the speed of moped on the road will be slower, contributing to the redution in moped accidents. If any of the aforementioned conditions is the case, we cannot conclude that the accidents would decrease by merely reduce the moped rentals.
Finally, even if such a limitation is effective in Torseau, another crucial question we need to answer is about the source of the moped in Balmer. The author of the letter claims that policy in Torseau will also suit for Balmer. But it is likely that residents in Balmer have their won moped. With little need to rent moped, such a regulation will not help reduce the number of moped in Balmer, and thus not contribute the reduce the accidents. Likewise, it is equally possible that more moped in Balmer are from other cities. If so, the policy would also fail to reduce the accident. We need to, therefore, ask these questions to evaluate the argument.
In conclusion, it is understandable that the author would like to reduce the accident. But it is unsate to conclude such a policy would be effective without answering questions mentioned above.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 407 350
No. of Characters: 1964 1500
No. of Different Words: 175 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.492 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.826 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.595 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 149 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.958 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.907 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.792 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.331 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.491 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.114 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 242, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...rabable that most pedestrains in Balmer dont obey basic traffic laws. Under such cir...
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Line 5, column 167, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...limits on moped? The accident reduction doesnt necessarily imply that rental limitatio...
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Line 5, column 337, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...cate the moped drivers and pedestrians, so as to arise their awareness of safety. Or per...
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Line 7, column 420, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...oped in Balmer, and thus not contribute the reduce the accidents. Likewise, it is equally ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, however, if, likewise, may, regarding, so, therefore, thus, as to, in conclusion, to begin with, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2030.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 405.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01234567901 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69640030551 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456790123457 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 651.6 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.7427430486 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.5833333333 119.503703932 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.875 23.324526521 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.16666666667 5.70786347227 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 6.88822355289 218% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199167643675 0.218282227539 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0686020363849 0.0743258471296 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537634031639 0.0701772020484 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124687673176 0.128457276422 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0585806169401 0.0628817314937 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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