The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette."The population on Balmer Island increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Is

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The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"The population on Balmer Island increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island plans to limit the number of mopeds rented by each of the island's six moped rental companies from 50 per day to 30 per day during the summer season. Last year, the neighboring island of Torseau enforced similar limits on moped rentals and saw a 50 percent reduction in moped accidents. We predict that putting these limits into effect on Balmer Island will result in the same reduction in moped accidents.“

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.

According to the letter, the editor of the Balmer Island argued that the town council of Balmer Island should reduce the number of accidents including mopeds and pedestrians through restriction which limit moped rental companies to rent only 30 mopeds per day. It seems reasonable at first, however, weak predictions led me to question the reliability of the argument.

First, we should consider whether the argument asserting that increaed population of Balmer Island is one of the factor of the moped accidents. It is possible that accidents rate increase would be accompanied with arisen population. However, it is questionable that the increased population is significant or not, 100,000 number of people might be trivial number that could not influence any changes in accidents which is because initial population of the Island is already huge. Even if the increased population is significant enough to change the accident rate, the town council should watch it in the long run because it has not been proved that population boom has affect any accident increase.

Second, council should not blindly follow the restriction policy of Torseau, because of different culture and envirionment. For example, the previous rental number of mopeds per rental shop might be exorbitant that it was main problem that cause many accidents. So, the suppress of Torseau which squash rental companies to rent lesser was efficacious. However, the initial number of the Balmer Island is already minute that if the council restrict the rental shop many people in the Island might bespeak their complain. The number of increased population is 100,000 in three weeks, it is very huge number comparing with 300 mopeds per day in Balmer Island.

Lastly, the editor has misunderstand the problem that the accidents of the pedestrain could not be reduced by decreasing number of mopeds. the town council could curtail the mopeds accident by reducing number of moped but not pedestrain. Since there are many factors that affect pedestrian accident not only mopeds, such as mal paved sidewalks and roads.

In summary, the editor’s arguments seem unconvincing in many grounds. To bolster the assertion the editor should afford more reasonable and rational preditions to reduce the accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 268, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... problem that cause many accidents. So, the suppress of Torseau which squash rental companie...
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Line 7, column 25, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'misunderstood'.
Suggestion: misunderstood
...lmer Island. Lastly, the editor has misunderstand the problem that the accidents of the p...
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Line 7, column 141, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...reduced by decreasing number of mopeds. the town council could curtail the mopeds a...
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Line 7, column 176, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'mopeds'' or 'moped's'?
Suggestion: mopeds'; moped's
...eds. the town council could curtail the mopeds accident by reducing number of moped bu...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, lastly, second, so, for example, in summary, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1954.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 365.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35342465753 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73085687709 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.47397260274 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 586.8 705.55239521 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.4888642032 57.8364921388 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.125 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8125 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8125 5.70786347227 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.424007701423 0.218282227539 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135219838533 0.0743258471296 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109416532428 0.0701772020484 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234640172672 0.128457276422 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0603824085195 0.0628817314937 96% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Sentence: First, we should consider whether the argument asserting that increaed population of Balmer Island is one of the factor of the moped accidents.
Error: increaed Suggestion: increased

Sentence: Second, council should not blindly follow the restriction policy of Torseau, because of different culture and envirionment.
Error: envirionment Suggestion: environment

Sentence: So, the suppress of Torseau which squash rental companies to rent lesser was efficacious.
Error: efficacious Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: Lastly, the editor has misunderstand the problem that the accidents of the pedestrain could not be reduced by decreasing number of mopeds. the town council could curtail the mopeds accident by reducing number of moped but not pedestrain.
Error: pedestrain Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: Since there are many factors that affect pedestrian accident not only mopeds, such as mal paved sidewalks and roads.
Error: mal Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: To bolster the assertion the editor should afford more reasonable and rational preditions to reduce the accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians.
Error: preditions Suggestion: predictions

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argument 1 -- not OK

argument 2 -- not OK

argument 3 -- not OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 365 350
No. of Characters: 1901 1500
No. of Different Words: 165 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.371 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.208 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.638 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 168 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.931 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.367 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.61 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.12 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5