To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In dev

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To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

Some people believe that we must study major cities of a society in order to penetrate the prominent characteristics of the society. However, there have been many societies that was explained by a person, not by its major cities. Thus, I disagree with the given statement.

A accomplished scientist, Thomas Edison, could be a proper example of person who represents the society of the era when people were struggling to utilize electronic better. Edison was one of scientists who were inventing many devises for people in America. In the period, whole society was shocked when lightbulb was adverted, it was stunning devise to all. However, lightbulbs were evernescent and expensive, moreover, it was difficult for contemporaries to develope more efficient lightbulb that only moneyed people and government facilities were able to use them. However, thanks to Edison’s unrelenting effort, a knew long-lasting and inexpensive lightbulb showed up to the society. As we can see, a single person lights the society with his great effort and help understand the society’s characteristics, also.

Another example is a leader, Kim Dae Jung, a past president of South Korea. South Korea was severe divided country and still the only country which is seperated. In the past, when Kim Dae Jung was a president, North Korea was in adverse economy condition and relationship between North and South was abysmal that it necessarily required greate strategy. However, Dae Jung started to endorse North Korea with many foods and clothes in order to solve the deprivation of North Korea. Dae Jung struggled until his retirement, due to his neverenging effort, two country made successful conference and Dae Jung won the Nobel Prize, finally. Dae Jung help world to understand political issue of North and South Korea.

In summary, not like other people, I believe it has been a person not cities that explain the society’s characteristic more better.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'An' instead of 'A' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: An
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Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...and the society's characteristics, also. Another example is a leader, Kim D...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, moreover, so, still, thus, in summary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 58.6224719101 63% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1648.0 2235.4752809 74% => OK
No of words: 311.0 442.535393258 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29903536977 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98328868414 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 215.323595506 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553054662379 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 704.065955056 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.9427450639 60.3974514979 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.0 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4375 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0625 5.21951772744 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0887949951367 0.243740707755 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0393760615648 0.0831039109588 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.04341855315 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0765786133533 0.150359130593 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0725944514562 0.0667264976115 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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