The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"The population on Balmer Island increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island plans to limit the number of mopeds rented by each of the island's six moped rental companies from 50 per day to 30 per day during the summer season. Last year, the neighboring island of Torseau enforced similar limits on moped rentals and saw a 50 percent reduction in moped accidents. We predict that putting these limits into effect on Balmer Island will result in the same reduction in moped accidents."
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
What worked for Torseau island may not work for Balmer island but what works for balmer island will work for sure.
With out knowing the population of Torseau, width of the the roads in torseau and other geographical factors we can't conclude that limiting the number of mopeds decreased the accidents number. There is a possibility that limiting the number of roads and coupled with some other factors may lead to reduction in accidents in Torseau. It is a grave mistake to think that limiting the number of mopeds decrease the accidents number in Balmer as the population in Balmer may be far greater than Torsearu. In that case limiting the number of mopeds will not be helpful in reduction of accidents in Balmer island.
On top of that, Torseau might have had more number of moped rental companies. So, limiting such a greater number of moped rental companies may have the significant reduction in the number of mopeds and lead to lesser number of accidents. But, in the Balmer island case, the number of mopeds running may already be less and may be it is the population that we need to take care. There is no substantial evidence to say that limiting the number of mopeds rented by moped rental companies on Balmer Island will result in the same reduction in moped accidents
So, analyzing the reasons behind the accidents in Balmer island will help in materializing a viable solution for the Balmer island but not by imitating the same resolutions implemented by neighboring countries.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
No. of Words: 256 350
need more arguments and the two arguments are relatively similar.
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Whenever there are comparisons for A and B, we can easily get two arguments:
1. maybe there are other reasons for A
2. suppose it works for A, it may not work for B.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 256 350
No. of Characters: 1221 1500
No. of Different Words: 105 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.77 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.546 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 101 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 56 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 40 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.643 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.534 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.744 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.294 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WITH_OUT[1]
Message: This word is usually written together. Did you mean 'without'?
Suggestion: Without
...or balmer island will work for sure. With out knowing the population of Torseau, widt...
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Line 3, column 54, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...ing the population of Torseau, width of the the roads in torseau and other geographical...
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Line 3, column 54, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...ing the population of Torseau, width of the the roads in torseau and other geographical...
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Line 3, column 113, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...rseau and other geographical factors we cant conclude that limiting the number of mo...
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Line 5, column 324, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: maybe
... mopeds running may already be less and may be it is the population that we need to ta...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.6327345309 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 28.8173652695 38% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1246.0 2260.96107784 55% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 256.0 441.139720559 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8671875 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57522327233 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 204.123752495 51% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.41015625 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 387.9 705.55239521 55% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.2959306939 57.8364921388 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.444444444 119.503703932 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4444444444 23.324526521 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.55555555556 5.70786347227 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317059641166 0.218282227539 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.161909844967 0.0743258471296 218% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0882675626769 0.0701772020484 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215488094216 0.128457276422 168% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0285168116367 0.0628817314937 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.3799401198 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.3550499002 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 98.500998004 47% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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