People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
People's behavior is determined by the response they choose to create in their mind for a event happened in their life. I disagree with the claim that People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
I agree that factors like bad and good situations, happy and sad moments impact a human's behavior. All these are external factors beyond any human's control. No human can control them. But how a human react to this external factors can shape his behavior according to his choice. The precious gift a human has is his logical thinking. Logical thinking is the ability to interpret the thingsin different ways. By taking a good way, a human moulds their behavior in a good way.
For example, Let's say a student puts in lot of efforts to crack an examination. Unfortunately. due to some external factors he could not write the exam as he wished. Now, the student has two choices to make things better. He can either think optimistically to give the exam again by taking measures to prevent the earlier bad situation or think pessimestically about the unfortunate situation happened and never resort to any real effort again. At this point the behavior is shaped. All the difference happens by making the right choice. People those who learn from their past mistakes can make better lives.
By consolidating all the above points, we can say that people's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 88, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...they choose to create in their mind for a event happened in their life. I disagre...
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Line 3, column 83, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'humans'' or 'human's'?
Suggestion: humans'; human's
...uations, happy and sad moments impact a humans behavior. All these are external factor...
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Line 5, column 96, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Due
...to crack an examination. Unfortunately. due to some external factors he could not w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.5258426966 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 58.6224719101 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1204.0 2235.4752809 54% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 247.0 442.535393258 56% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87449392713 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96437052324 4.55969084622 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63025192327 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 215.323595506 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.570850202429 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 373.5 704.065955056 53% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 14.0 23.0359550562 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.7948978716 60.3974514979 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.8235294118 118.986275619 60% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 14.5294117647 23.4991977007 62% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.41176470588 5.21951772744 27% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174254529638 0.243740707755 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598647251209 0.0831039109588 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0954595244977 0.0758088955206 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153943991441 0.150359130593 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116710970325 0.0667264976115 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 14.1392134831 62% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 48.8420337079 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.1743820225 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.37 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 100.480337079 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 11.8971910112 46% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.2143820225 68% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.