The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
They statement says that the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in any field is by instilling them a sense of cooperation, not competition. It brings positive vibes to anyone who read this statement. Competition makes people focus on only winning. That means one's win becomes another's loss. But Cooperation makes people focus on collective success. A collective success of the society is signigicant than individuals success of the society. Here, Cooperation is needed to achieve collective success of the society.
By instilling a sense of cooperation makes young people easily understand the feelings of the others. They can empathize what others feel. In order to lead an industry or a government, a leader should be able to understand the lives of the people working below him. Without this, no leader can lead them towards a better society. A leader who understands his people better can govern them better. Whereas, Competition always promotes outperforming each other. If a leader is competitve nature, he may think the people, who are not good at work, are incapable instead of helping them to become better at work. So, Cooperation wins over Competition in this case.
Cooperation strives people towards win-win situation rather than win or loss situation. A win-win situation is what society needs. In a competition, if two people are given a task creating a beautiful art then the best of the two people finish the competition by creating a beautiful art and the worst of the two people finish the competition by creating a art which is not as beautiful as the former art. It's win-lose situation. Suppose, if two people are given a task of creating two beautiful arts then both of the two people work on the two arts by helping each other and produce two beautiful arts. It's the win-win situation. That means, by providing a chance for cooperation among people, the society can get more resutls. Cooperation among young people is much needed when they become leaders of the society and they will be able to understand the value cooperation over competition.
Sometimes, Competition brings out the best of a human. That has to be acknowledged. But Competition with one's self is always better than competition with others.
Cooperation helps in making a greater good to the society than the Competition.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 398, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s people better can govern them better. Whereas, Competition always promotes outperform...
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Line 5, column 21, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to people'
Suggestion: to people
...on in this case. Cooperation strives people towards win-win situation rather than w...
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Line 5, column 356, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ople finish the competition by creating a art which is not as beautiful as the fo...
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Line 5, column 605, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...h other and produce two beautiful arts. Its the win-win situation. That means, by p...
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Line 7, column 106, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...o be acknowledged. But Competition with ones self is always better than competition ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, still, then, whereas, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 30.0 12.9106741573 232% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1969.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 390.0 442.535393258 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04871794872 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86936825133 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 215.323595506 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.441025641026 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 609.3 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 23.0359550562 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 56.5589389951 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.9259259259 118.986275619 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4444444444 23.4991977007 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.66666666667 5.21951772744 32% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 10.2758426966 204% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196097685713 0.243740707755 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0534906141348 0.0831039109588 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0909161394737 0.0758088955206 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102098198932 0.150359130593 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0694759730038 0.0667264976115 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 14.1392134831 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 48.8420337079 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 12.1743820225 72% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.96 8.38706741573 83% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 100.480337079 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.2143820225 68% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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