The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"The population on Balmer Island doubles during the summer months. During the summer, then, the town council of Balmer Island should decrease the maximum number of moped rentals allowed at each of the island's six moped and bicycle rental companies from 50 per day to 30 per day. This will significantly reduce the number of summertime accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians. The neighboring island of Torseau actually saw a 50 percent reduction in moped accidents last year when Torseau's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals. To help reduce moped accidents, therefore, we should also enforce these limitations during the summer months."
The letter presented to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette states problem of the accidents between pedestrians and moped vehicles. It recommends that if number of moped allowed to use are restricted then it would solve the problem of accidents. It also mentions that neighboring island Torseau also implemented the same policy on the island and last year and they noticed decline in accidents by 50 percent. Therefore the letter states that it would be the same case with the Balmer island without substantiating assumptions behind making decision as well as lack of evidence that supports argument of the letter.
Firstly, no data of the current population of the Balmer island and also six rental companies of mopeds and bicycles are enough for how many people to satisfy the need are not provided. Without number of bicycles and moped held by each rental company and the number of population it can not be determined that restriction on the rental companies will be proven useful or not. If population of island is very less compared to rental mopeds and bicycles rental companies have even after imposing restriction it will not make much difference in the number of cases of accidents.
Assuming that bicycles and mopeds are restricted to 50 per day to 30 per day will allow less population access to bicycles and mopeds, it doesn't prove that it will reduce accidents because it depends on the rider and the pedestrian. Increase in pedestrians forced by less accessibility of bicycles and moped will increase the probability of accidents as there are more pedestrians on the roads to bulge into. It will make situations worse if people start using heavy vehicles for transportation needs, of which no consideration is taken into account by the argument of the letter.
Letter states that Torseau island implementing policy restricting availability of smaller vehicles seen decline in accidents by 50 percent, to which no statistical data from which the validity can be verified. May be there were too many mopeds and bicycles were available before and therefore even restricting it didn't made any difference. The decline was because of implementation of rigorous testing of rider to be eligible to ride which would certainly undermine the letter's recommendation. If the laws don't restrict anyone from riding the vehicles who are ineligible to ride, there wouldn't be any significant change in accidents.
Conclusively, author of the letter doesn't provide actual statistical data to verify that the suggestion will work on the Balmer island or not. It also make assumptions that don't hold in specific conditions, on which there is no control of human and fails to substantiate assumptions. Not taking into the account of some serious factors and comparing it with other island's result without missing crucial information it is unpersuasive.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The letter presented to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette states problem of the accidents between pedestrians and moped vehicles.
Description: The word states is not usually used as a verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Suggestion: Refer to states
Sentence: Firstly, no data of the current population of the Balmer island and also six rental companies of mopeds and bicycles are enough for how many people to satisfy the need are not provided.
Description: The fragment satisfy the need is not usually followed by are
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace are with is
Sentence: Increase in pedestrians forced by less accessibility of bicycles and moped will increase the probability of accidents as there are more pedestrians on the roads to bulge into.
Description: A preposition is not usually followed by a sentence terminator
Suggestion: Refer to into
Sentence: Letter states that Torseau island implementing policy restricting availability of smaller vehicles seen decline in accidents by 50 percent, to which no statistical data from which the validity can be verified.
Description: The fragment vehicles seen decline is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace seen with verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Sentence: May be there were too many mopeds and bicycles were available before and therefore even restricting it didn't made any difference.
Description: The tag a conjunction, subordinating is not usually followed by and
Suggestion: Refer to before and and
Sentence: If the laws don't restrict anyone from riding the vehicles who are ineligible to ride, there wouldn't be any significant change in accidents.
Description: The fragment laws don ' is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace don with verb, past tense
Sentence: It also make assumptions that don't hold in specific conditions, on which there is no control of human and fails to substantiate assumptions.
Description: A Single quote is not usually followed by an adjective, superlative
Suggestion: Refer to ' and t
Sentence: Assuming that bicycles and mopeds are restricted to 50 per day to 30 per day will allow less population access to bicycles and mopeds, it doesn't prove that it will reduce accidents because it depends on the rider and the pedestrian.
Error: doesn Suggestion: does
Sentence: May be there were too many mopeds and bicycles were available before and therefore even restricting it didn't made any difference.
Error: didn Suggestion: did
Sentence: If the laws don't restrict anyone from riding the vehicles who are ineligible to ride, there wouldn't be any significant change in accidents.
Error: wouldn Suggestion: would
Sentence: Conclusively, author of the letter doesn't provide actual statistical data to verify that the suggestion will work on the Balmer island or not.
Error: doesn Suggestion: does
Sentence: Not taking into the account of some serious factors and comparing it with other island's result without missing crucial information it is unpersuasive.
Error: unpersuasive Suggestion: No alternate word
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 470 350
No. of Characters: 2359 1500
No. of Different Words: 209 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.656 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.019 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.844 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 183 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 125 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.647 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.656 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.529 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.338 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.591 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.08 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 183, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'using'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'allow' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: using
...ommends that if number of moped allowed to use are restricted then it would solve the ...
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Line 1, column 414, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ced decline in accidents by 50 percent. Therefore the letter states that it would be the ...
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Line 9, column 140, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ation access to bicycles and mopeds, it doesnt prove that it will reduce accidents bec...
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Line 13, column 315, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...efore and therefore even restricting it didnt made any difference. The decline was be...
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Line 13, column 472, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'letters'' or 'letter's'?
Suggestion: letters'; letter's
...ide which would certainly undermine the letters recommendation. If the laws dont restri...
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Line 13, column 508, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...the letters recommendation. If the laws dont restrict anyone from riding the vehicle...
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Line 13, column 588, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...icles who are ineligible to ride, there wouldnt be any significant change in accidents....
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Line 17, column 37, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... Conclusively, author of the letter doesnt provide actual statistical data to veri...
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Line 17, column 153, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'makes'?
Suggestion: makes
...rk on the Balmer island or not. It also make assumptions that dont hold in specific ...
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Line 17, column 175, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...d or not. It also make assumptions that dont hold in specific conditions, on which t...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, so, then, therefore, well, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 55.5748502994 126% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2412.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 464.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19827586207 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87939342101 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450431034483 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 765.9 705.55239521 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.9649461984 57.8364921388 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 141.882352941 119.503703932 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2941176471 23.324526521 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.70786347227 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195736315198 0.218282227539 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.074747834859 0.0743258471296 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0665531967366 0.0701772020484 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120568366961 0.128457276422 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0801961217576 0.0628817314937 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 14.3799401198 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 48.3550499002 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.197005988 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 98.500998004 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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