The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette."The population on Balmer Island increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balm

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The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.

"The population on Balmer Island increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island plans to limit the number of mopeds rented by each of the island's six moped rental companies from 50 per day to 30 per day during the summer season. Last year, the neighboring island of Torseau enforced similar limits on moped rentals and saw a 50 percent reduction in moped accidents. We predict that putting these limits into effect on Balmer Island will result in the same reduction in moped accidents."

Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.

Above argument seems plausible but meticulous analysis of the argument makes the argument specious. The measure to reduce the moped accidents by comparing to the another island undermine the conclusion for three reasons.

Firstly, the reason of the accidents in not mentioned in the argument. Population is said to be increased and accidents involving moped and pedestrian is to be decreased. What if the accident is due to high speed of mope and not hence can not be reduced by reducing the number of moped? There is no clarity in causes of accident which undermine the argument.

Secondly, the reduction from island's six moped rental companies from 50 per day to 30 per day is the measure to reduce accidents. What if the number of moped rental companies in the town increased to 10 since the population is going to increase in summer and is higher scope op moped rental companies in the town? The measure to reduce accident seems vague and specific effective measure to reduce accident based on its cause should be mentioned to strengthen the argument.

Finally, speaker mentions the neighboring island of Torseau had 50% reduction last year and hence similar achievement will be gained by Balmer island. This assumption is unwarranted and weaken the argument. May the island of Torseu had accidents due to large number of moped and reducing number of moped resulted decrease in accidents. It may not be same case in Balmer island, it may highly differ from Torseu island. Moreover, if the reduction in number of moped resulted decrese in accidents in Balmer island, how can it have same reduction as that in island of Torseau?

In conclusion, the speaker have made unsubstantiated conclusion based on various unwarranted assumptions. To bolster the argument the causes of the accident must be mentioned, the measures to reduce accidents must have clarity and comparison with another island must be done based on the similarity between them. The unwarranted assumption have weaken the argument.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 346, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'weakened'.
Suggestion: weakened
...n them. The unwarranted assumption have weaken the argument.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, hence, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 13.6137724551 15% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 7.0 28.8173652695 24% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1677.0 2260.96107784 74% => OK
No of words: 329.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09726443769 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76912207485 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 204.123752495 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.428571428571 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 533.7 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.8262765764 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.6470588235 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3529411765 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.70588235294 5.70786347227 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286682142342 0.218282227539 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100469347838 0.0743258471296 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.075537479323 0.0701772020484 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161457112908 0.128457276422 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0756775926551 0.0628817314937 120% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 329 350
No. of Characters: 1640 1500
No. of Different Words: 137 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.259 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.985 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.694 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 133 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 95 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.353 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.881 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.362 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.588 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.074 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5