The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a journal on environmental issues."Over the past year, the Crust Copper Company (CCC) has purchased over 10,000 square miles of land in the tropical nation of West Fredonia. Mining copper on this land wi

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The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a journal on environmental issues.

"Over the past year, the Crust Copper Company (CCC) has purchased over 10,000 square miles of land in the tropical nation of West Fredonia. Mining copper on this land will inevitably result in pollution and, since West Fredonia is the home of several endangered animal species, in environmental disaster. But such disasters can be prevented if consumers simply refuse to purchase products that are made with CCC's copper unless the company abandons its mining plans."

The editor of a journal received a letter on environmental issues which implies that the Crust Copper Company (CCC) has purchased over 10,000 square miles of land in the tropical nation of West Fredonia and mining copper in this region will result in an inevitable increase in pollution which can be accounted harmful for the endangered species existing in this region. The writer of letter suggests the editor that if the consumers refuse to purchase the products of Crust Copper Company, than the company will abandon its mining plans. The writer stated an opinion based on an incomplete study of the situation. Many questions arises regarding the extant of the endangered species. What is the reason behind the species being endangered ? Is pollution a prime factor that causes harm to the species ? Here, the writer failed to answer these questions and gave a remedy without considering the factors.

Firstly, the writer states that CCC purchased 10,000 square miles of land, but he did not mention about why the company bought a large area of land. He implied that the company bought land for mining copper, but the land can be used for any other purpose too. Hence, the writer failed to give a bolster evidence that the company bought the land for mining purpose.

Secondly, he tried to convince the editor that the pollution caused by mining copper will be inevitable and it will be pernicious to the endangered species. Moreover, even if the land was purchased for mining purposes, it is inappropriate to state that the pollution caused by the mining purpose will harm the already endangered species. The writer did not mention the factor that is a threat to the species. There can be any other factor, rather than pollution, that is responsible for the decline in the species. It is possible that due to unavailability of water or food the species may be facing a danger. The writer defaulted in providing a concrete support to his assumption.

Thirdly, the writer suggests that if the consumers refuse to purchase products that are made with CCC's copper, then the company will abandon its mining plans. This gives rise to certain questions. Wether the products produced by CCC's copper is limited to West Fredonia or it is exported to other cities also ? Hence, if the company exports it products to different cities, then a decline in sales of its products in West Fredonia won't affect the company's revenues to a larger extent. Meanwhile, if CCC is the only copper producing company in West Fredonia, then it is inevident to say that the people will refuse to buy its products as there is no other source of such products in the city. Hence, the writer's argument has certain fallacies that is not cogent and it lacks essential information regarding this issue.

Recapitulating the above mentioned points, it is clear that the writer failed to amass the essential information regarding the factors affecting the existence of species, the purpose of CCC behind purchasing land, the information about any other copper producing company present in West Fredonia and the reliance of people on CCC's products. Hence, it will be a mistake to take a decision without studying about the factors and other subjects as mentioned above.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 489, Rule ID: COMMA_THAN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'then'?
Suggestion: then
...e the products of Crust Copper Company, than the company will abandon its mining pla...
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Line 1, column 537, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... company will abandon its mining plans. The writer stated an opinion based on an in...
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Line 1, column 628, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'arise'.
Suggestion: arise
... study of the situation. Many questions arises regarding the extant of the endangered ...
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Line 7, column 703, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...f such products in the city. Hence, the writers argument has certain fallacies that is ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 55.5748502994 122% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2698.0 2260.96107784 119% => OK
No of words: 543.0 441.139720559 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96869244936 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82725184711 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58545530944 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.406998158379 0.468620217663 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 836.1 705.55239521 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 1.0 0.471057884232 212% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.1391180138 57.8364921388 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.416666667 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.625 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.70833333333 5.70786347227 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315592789746 0.218282227539 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0835078414962 0.0743258471296 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106040869343 0.0701772020484 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187129920693 0.128457276422 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0909863084078 0.0628817314937 145% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 98.500998004 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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