The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a local newspaper.
"Commuters complain that increased rush-hour traffic on Blue Highway between the suburbs and the city center has doubled their commuting time. The favored proposal of the motorists' lobby is to widen the highway, adding an additional lane of traffic. But last year's addition of a lane to the nearby Green Highway was followed by a worsening of traffic jams on it. A better alternative is to add a bicycle lane to Blue Highway. Many area residents are keen bicyclists. A bicycle lane would encourage them to use bicycles to commute, and so would reduce rush-hour traffic rather than fostering an increase."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
While the solution of the rush-hour traffic suggested by the author seems plausible and promising, however, his plan rest on a number of unjustified assumption and also failure to take into account other factors that can jeopardize his plan. Also, the arthur tends to predict the future and mentioned vagued words which faulted his claim and compromise his conclusion.
The arthur assumed that because the proposal to solve the rush-hour traffic problem by widening the road lane didn't work in green highway that it is not going to work in blue highway. However, just because the plan didn't work in green highway does not mean it won't work in blue highway. Is there any evidence that show the plan to widen the car lane won't work in blue highway? The arthur never explained why the scheme won't work in the blue highway. Therefore, the arthur failed to establish enough similarity between the blue highway and the green highway.
In addition to this, because the target to ebb road traffic was not successful in the previous year at a particular place does not mean it is still the same, a lot of changes might have have done to enable it to work. The situation might have been resolved. Furthermore, the argument was further flawed when the arthur tried to predict the future, that his plan will encourage commuters to use the bicycle lane will curtail the road traffic. However, what is good on a short run might not be good on the long run.
Finally, the arthur assumed that commuters will happily welcome the new proposal and will be encouraged to use bicycle to commute. Is there any proof that this latest plan is going to encourage the commuters to use bicycle as a means of transportation? However, maybe a large population of the commuters will still insist on using car transport because of one reason or the other. Maybe because it gives them high comfort that bicycle transport can't boast of or they don't have money to purchase bicycle.
Therefore in order to validate this claim, the arthur needs to provide evidence that the new scheme the commuters into using bicycle for transportation.
The new proposal to diminish road traffic by adding bicycle lane in the blue highway is optimistic and cannot be gainsay. However, the arthur failed to take into account some certain factors that can make his plan ineffective, also , he provided no evidence that show that the proposal by motorist lobby that didn't work in green highway is not going to work in blue highway. Therefore, in order to make his claim incontrovertible, the arthur needs to investigate those factors that are likely to make his plan not to work, provide good analogy between the blue highway and the green highway and also provide evidence that proposal of the motorist lobby won't work in blue highway.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 487 350
No. of Characters: 2274 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.698 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.669 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.389 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 152 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 123 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.632 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.536 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.37 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.37 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.184 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 111, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...affic problem by widening the road lane didnt work in green highway that it is not go...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 215, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...highway. However, just because the plan didnt work in green highway does not mean it ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 182, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: have
... still the same, a lot of changes might have have done to enable it to work. The situatio...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 187, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...l the same, a lot of changes might have have done to enable it to work. The situatio...
^^^^
Line 4, column 446, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...hem high comfort that bicycle transport cant boast of or they dont have money to pur...
^^^^
Line 4, column 468, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...bicycle transport cant boast of or they dont have money to purchase bicycle. Theref...
^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...y dont have money to purchase bicycle. Therefore in order to validate this claim, the ar...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 231, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...that can make his plan ineffective, also , he provided no evidence that show that ...
^^
Line 6, column 309, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...hat the proposal by motorist lobby that didnt work in green highway is not going to w...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, while, in addition, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2308.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 479.0 441.139720559 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81837160752 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48089575557 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 204.123752495 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.405010438413 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 717.3 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.9356163138 57.8364921388 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.473684211 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2105263158 23.324526521 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174353644911 0.218282227539 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0642811658487 0.0743258471296 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0473053018453 0.0701772020484 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0866419332157 0.128457276422 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.051281941422 0.0628817314937 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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