The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a local newspaper."Commuters complain that increased rush-hour traffic on Blue Highway between the suburbs and the city center has doubled their commuting time. The favored proposal of the motorists

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The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a local newspaper.

"Commuters complain that increased rush-hour traffic on Blue Highway between the suburbs and the city center has doubled their commuting time. The favored proposal of the motorists' lobby is to widen the highway, adding an additional lane of traffic. But last year's addition of a lane to the nearby Green Highway was followed by a worsening of traffic jams on it. A better alternative is to add a bicycle lane to Blue Highway. Many area residents are keen bicyclists. A bicycle lane would encourage them to use bicycles to commute, and so would reduce rush-hour traffic rather than fostering an increase".

The prompt encourages the municipality to adding a bicycle lane to Blue highway to contribute to congestion problem. although at first glance the proposal seems plausible, it is deficiant in evidence and perhaps groundless.

first, the word "many" used to discribe the quantity of keen bicylists seems dubios. it is not clear whether those many keen people constitute an appreciable amount of the whole commuters or they are large in absolute quality and minor in relative terms. For instance, there may be a thousand of commuters using the highway every day, and the number of avid cyclists may not be more than a hundred. In this case, although we can designate those avid people "many", but they clearly do not make up a considerable proportionate of the whole commuters. In fact, we need to know the number of commuters and the quantity of possible bicyclists in order to judge the proposal accurately.

Another problem is about author's claim about encouraging keen bicyclists. To be sure, a gift of bicycle lane is always welcomed by bicylce fans; however, it may not encourage them to put their cars aside and try commuting by bicylce. it is possible that those commuters take a long way to work each day, making it difficult or irrational to do that using a bicylce. Again as an example, if an average commuter travels for 20 kilometers from home to work or vice versa, it would take approximately 30 minutes and of course a lot of energy to use bicycle for those commutes. if we are going to judge the proposal's viability, the author would be better to provide us the average distance which a commuter travels each day.

The last but not the least, is that maybe the author is overlooking an important factor, which is the increasing number of cars over time. The author claims that widening the Green highway did not mitigate the congestion problem, even seemed to exacerbate that. although, is is possible that adding a new lane for cars actually worked out, and for a fixed number of cars it would decrease the congestion; however, due to the increasing numbers of cars over time, more and more people show up in streets each day. Therefore, the widening plan was not necessarily futile and we need the total number of cars in the city to evaluate the efficacy of that plan.

In sum, the author seems to base his judgment on insufficient evidences. it would be better if he presented the actual numbers and precise statistics upon which a rational judgement would have made.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, look, may, so, therefore, for instance, in fact, of course

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2096.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 430.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87441860465 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78861938116 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513953488372 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9761837236 57.8364921388 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.444444444 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8888888889 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 5.70786347227 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110134481536 0.218282227539 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0363226213168 0.0743258471296 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0279023330338 0.0701772020484 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0563072076594 0.128457276422 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0303408944203 0.0628817314937 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 430 350
No. of Characters: 2008 1500
No. of Different Words: 211 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.554 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.67 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.61 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 35.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.622 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.917 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.358 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.658 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.182 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5