The following appeared as a letter to the editor of a national newspaper.
"Your recent article on corporate downsizing* in Elthyria maintains that the majority of competent workers who have lost jobs as a result of downsizing face serious economic hardship, often for years, before finding other suitable employment. But this claim is undermined by a recent report on the Elthyrian economy, which found that since 1999 far more jobs have been created than have been eliminated, bringing the unemployment rate in Elthyria to its lowest level in decades. Moreover, two-thirds of these newly created jobs have been in industries that tend to pay above-average wages, and the vast majority of these jobs are full-time."
*Downsizing is the process whereby corporations deliberately make themselves smaller, reducing the number of their employees.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In this letter, the author states that workers who have lost jobs because of the corporate downsizing in Elthyria may not face serious economic hardship. he supports this claim by mentioning the recent report of increased amount of new job creation and some part of new jobs tend to have a good income. this argument is firstly persuasive, but lack of evidence leads me question of its validity in many respects.
First, the author needs to provide solid evidence on the time shift in report. The recent report on the Elthyrian economy states that far more jobs created since 1999. it could be possible that the new job created more since 1999, but it is not likely to be increased because of adverse economic condition of the present. Also, the increasement of reporting means can make to report of newly created job available. Before, lack of technology and platform may lack the record of the new jobs.
Second, the author should make the supplement on evidence of the quality of newly created job. newly created job may not fit to the competent workers. it could be a part-time job which requires simple labor rather than competent workforce. In this case, competent workers couldn't satisfy with the new job and it will affect to the situation badly.
Third, the author give the concrete evidence on that the actual size of the newly created job and its credibility of quality. he asserts that two-third of new jobs tend to pay above-average wages. The original size of the newly created job could be small, so two-thirds of new jobs could be a negligible amount. Even though we accept this, the rest of people who didn't find a new job are still remained. In addition, the word 'tend' didn't assure if it actually payed above average. Tendency could be changed in various situations and circumstances.
In summary, the author's letter is unconvincing. To strengthen this argument, he should make concrete evidences on the credibility of reports, and quality and exact size of newly created job in Elthyria.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 346 350
No. of Characters: 1626 1500
No. of Different Words: 164 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.313 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.699 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.502 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 118 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 86 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.615 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.786 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.372 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.603 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.126 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, so, still, then, third, in addition, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1687.0 2260.96107784 75% => OK
No of words: 343.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91836734694 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58058503436 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498542274052 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 705.55239521 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.2634080655 57.8364921388 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.35 119.503703932 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.15 23.324526521 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161213694983 0.218282227539 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0561116407995 0.0743258471296 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0851265170944 0.0701772020484 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105610301864 0.128457276422 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.076082298953 0.0628817314937 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 14.3799401198 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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