The following is a recommendation from the personnel director to the president of Acme Publishing Company.
"Many other companies have recently stated that having their employees take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course has greatly improved productivity. One graduate of the course was able to read a 500-page report in only two hours; another graduate rose from an assistant manager to vice president of the company in under a year. Obviously, the faster you can read, the more information you can absorb in a single workday. Moreover, Easy Read would cost Acme only $500 per employee—a small price to pay when you consider the benefits. Included in this fee is a three-week seminar in Spruce City and a lifelong subscription to the Easy Read newsletter. Clearly, Acme would benefit greatly by requiring all of our employees to take the Easy Read course."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In this argument, the personnel director asserts that all employees should take the the easy read course because of that would improve productivity. he support this recommendation by mentioning that two graduates showed increase in productivity and that it is not that expensive if you consider gains. this argument sounds persuasive at first, but the lack of evidence makes me to question the validity of the recommendation.
First, the personnel director should support his recommendation to provide concrete evidence on that the two graduate’s achievement in productivity increase is only because of the easy read course. it is likely that the highly improved graduate result is based on his innate ability. it is possible to consider the situation that of already having a high reading speed because of a lot of reading experiences past or that in already passed competitive stage for promotion. Thus, personal ability and situation differences make it hard to assume that all employee will improve a lot after this course.
Second, the personnel director’s recommendation is not persuasive because it miss the exact budget plan of the course and the number of employees. he states that $500 cost per employee is a small price to pay considering the benefit. However, in case of the company might have the huge number of people, it could economically pressure the company’s asset. Moreover, the lifelong subscription to the easy read newsletter might be too much without considering that employee wouldn’t work in this company for their whole life. Besides the exact budget plan for taking this course and the validity of the program composition, it is hard to accept that the $500 cost per employee is a negligible price.
Lastly, the personnel director hastily assumes that this reading course would profitable to all employee in the company. Such a position who reads a lot, like market reports analyzer, would profit a lot because of taking this reading course. but for people working in packing part or sales part, it might be not that results the productivity increase. Therefore, applying the same reading course to all employees and expecting the same productivity increase is illogical.
In brief, the director's argument is invalid since reading course may not increase employee's productivity. To strengthen the argument, the director needs to provide all the evidence mentioned above.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 385 350
No. of Characters: 1976 1500
No. of Different Words: 174 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.43 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.132 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.83 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 156 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 84 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32.083 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.577 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.917 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.396 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.675 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.131 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, however, if, lastly, may, moreover, second, so, then, therefore, thus, in brief
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 28.8173652695 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2039.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 384.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30989583333 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01350471482 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473958333333 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 638.1 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.5070012953 57.8364921388 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 113.277777778 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55555555556 5.70786347227 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.25449101796 285% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312093272061 0.218282227539 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101361473259 0.0743258471296 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0674514798881 0.0701772020484 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177652650577 0.128457276422 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0305996963713 0.0628817314937 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.3550499002 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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