Claim: Many problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system.
Reason: Laws cannot change what is in people's hearts or minds.
Law and the legal system is one of the powerful way to change the people’s behavior and the promise between the society members. In some degree, it is true that laws cannot change and influence people’s heart and minds, however, legislation can change people’s value and perspectives and even make new behavior patterns.
Admittedly, changing what people thought in their heart and minds by a law is unsound in some situations. As an example, when National government enact the law of limiting plastic cups and plastic bags at a cafe and supermarket, people still ask to use plastic things for their convenience. As the side of service provider, shop owner felt hard to refuse this customer’s ask. Thus, people still use plastic cups at a cafe and this unchanging behavior acute in newspaper several times. As we can see in this case, I partly agree that it is hard to totally change the people’s mind by a law.
Even though we accept this, it is hard to agree that modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system. laws that have contributed to change people’s belief and attitude. In case of Paris agreement in 2015, laws between developed countries, who cares about global environments, enacted in global society to reduce the co2 production. As limiting the greenhouse gas production, people try to prevent the global warming. Factories could produce more and make more profit rather than stop their manufacturing to reduce the co2 production. Without this agreement, how many business leaders can make a decision to limit their production only because of the environment? From this aspect, letting know people about the limits and regulation by a law is the effective way to solve the modern society problematic situation.
In addition, law not only contribute to change the society but also affect to people perspectives and recognition. Before enacting the labor law in Korea 2019, constricting working hours to 52 hours a week, people have no concept about over-working. it was hard to use holidays and working until late hour was normal in company which has a competitive culture. but after the enactment of the labor laws, the recognition of the employer and employee changed. employers starts to think about the company culture and employee’s welfare and employees can officially ask of their authority to do not work in unappropriated hour.
Even though the law cannot change the people’s thinking in heart, I still agree that law and legal system is one of the powerful ways to solve the modern society. law is the social appointment to form the modern society to a better world. Saying this important appointment as impotent is unpersuasive.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Laws
...be solved by laws and the legal system. laws that have contributed to change people&...
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Suggestion: But
...ompany which has a competitive culture. but after the enactment of the labor laws, ...
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Suggestion: Employers
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Suggestion: Law
...erful ways to solve the modern society. law is the social appointment to form the m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, so, still, thus, in addition, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2286.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 445.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13707865169 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93502761015 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498876404494 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 694.8 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.7298603949 60.3974514979 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.909090909 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2272727273 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.72727272727 5.21951772744 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.374827563854 0.243740707755 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118467005713 0.0831039109588 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119360245882 0.0758088955206 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236342558251 0.150359130593 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105130634708 0.0667264976115 158% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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