The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex to its manager.
"One month ago, all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. Clearly, modifying showerheads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the Sunnyside Towers complex will increase our profits further."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In this letter, the owner of the apartment asserts that reducing the maximum waterflow of showerhead to one-third of its past will increase profits of the Sunnyside Towers complex. he supports his claim with such evidence with the result of modifying waterflow in last month and the fact that only a few complain was accepted. this assertion seems convincing at first, but unsounded evidences make me to reconsider about its validity.
First, the author needs to provide more solid evidence about the actual amount of water usage before and after the modification. he mentioned that actual readings of water usage are not yet available, so it is hard to conclude whether actual usage is decreased or not. Even if total water usage decreased, the reason of decrease could not be originated from the adjustment of water flow. also, the author mentioned that this change will save the water expenses of Sunny corporation. but we don’t know how many and what kind of properties are existed in this corporation. Therefore, we cannot conclude the mere modification in apartment complex would actually affect the expense of the entire corporation.
Second, the author should supply more concrete evidence about the resident’s complaints. he admitted there existed a few complaints which can be negligible. but he cannot simply deduce these few complaints as unimportant. People may too busy to complain or just wait until it solved naturally. water flow adjustment only continued for a month, so there can be accumulation of dissatisfaction in the future. Then, it can be a serious problem to residents and harm the satisfaction of the apartment badly.
Third, the author didn’t give us sound evidence about the adjustment condition would be same in first three buildings to all twelve buildings. The first three building possibly have relatively higher water pressure than others, so it was not that problematic here, but it would be different in the rest of buildings. also, there could be other expenses to adjust the waterflow. The new showerhead for low water pressure might be needed, or other pressure control machine could be additionally established. In such a situation, increase in profits cannot be assured.
In brief, the letter from the owner of the apartment was unconvincing. To strengthen this assertion, we need more verified evidences if the actual water usage would decrease, if it relates to the profits and if residents’ complain would not be significant permanently.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 404 350
No. of Characters: 2033 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.483 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.032 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.758 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 143 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 91 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.077 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.8 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.846 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.345 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.625 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.167 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...rofits of the Sunnyside Towers complex. he supports his claim with such evidence w...
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Suggestion: This
... that only a few complain was accepted. this assertion seems convincing at first, bu...
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Line 5, column 130, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: He
...sage before and after the modification. he mentioned that actual readings of water...
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Suggestion: Also
...ated from the adjustment of water flow. also, the author mentioned that this change ...
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Suggestion: But
...he water expenses of Sunny corporation. but we don't know how many and what ki...
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Suggestion: He
...e about the resident's complaints. he admitted there existed a few complaints...
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Suggestion: But
...few complaints which can be negligible. but he cannot simply deduce these few compl...
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Line 9, column 300, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: Water
...or just wait until it solved naturally. water flow adjustment only continued for a mo...
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Suggestion: Also
... be different in the rest of buildings. also, there could be other expenses to adjus...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, second, so, then, therefore, third, in brief, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2121.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 402.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27611940299 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94737071537 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519900497512 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 661.5 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.9382012283 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.4090909091 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2727272727 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09090909091 5.70786347227 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184028095151 0.218282227539 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.052123114977 0.0743258471296 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0695046649609 0.0701772020484 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102125355646 0.128457276422 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0600295047798 0.0628817314937 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 98.500998004 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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