The following appeared as a letter to the editor of a national newspaper.
"Your recent article on corporate downsizing* in Elthyria maintains that the majority of competent workers who have lost jobs as a result of downsizing face serious economic hardship, often for years, before finding other suitable employment. But this claim is undermined by a recent report on the Elthyrian economy, which found that since 1999 far more jobs have been created than have been eliminated, bringing the unemployment rate in Elthyria to its lowest level in decades. Moreover, two-thirds of these newly created jobs have been in industries that tend to pay above-average wages, and the vast majority of these jobs are full-time."
*Downsizing is the process whereby corporations deliberately make themselves smaller, reducing the number of their employees.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In the letter, the author argues that the majority of competent workers who have lost jobs as a result of downsizing will not face serious economic hardship. Although the argument may seem convincing at first, the lack of solid evidence leads me to question the validity of the argument.
first, the author should supplement the argument with more concrete evidence on the innate conditions in 1999 and the present. The author states that people who are downsized would not go through economic hardship because far more jobs have been created than have been eliminated since 1999 by a recent report on the Elthyrian economy. however, the inherent situations in 1999 and the present may be different. For example, because of the adverse economy at the present, many jobs may not have been created recently. therefore, workers who have lost jobs can face serious economic hardship.
Next, more solid evidence is needed on the validity of created jobs to prove that the new jobs fit competent workers. it is plausible that the new positions for candidates are for entry-level and novices. Thus, the majority of competent works might have difficulty finding jobs that suit them. therefore, the competent workers who were downsized will suffer financial problems.
Lastly, the author needs to provide specific evidence on the quality of new jobs. The author reports that two-thirds of these newly created jobs have been in industries that tend to pay above average wages, however, if the total number of newly created jobs is minute, two-thirds of these also may not be substantial. In addition, the "tendency" cannot be generalized as the real action. it is possible that two-thirds companies may not pay above average wages. therefore, even if the competent workers get new jobs, they may be in financial trouble.
In brief, the argument is not sound. To bolster the argument, the author should provide the aforementioned evidence.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 315 350
No. of Characters: 1571 1500
No. of Different Words: 145 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.213 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.987 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.501 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 120 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.741 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.419 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.699 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.175 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: First
...ion the validity of the argument. first, the author should supplement the argum...
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Line 5, column 337, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...recent report on the Elthyrian economy. however, the inherent situations in 1999 and th...
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Line 5, column 518, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...obs may not have been created recently. therefore, workers who have lost jobs can face se...
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Line 9, column 119, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...hat the new jobs fit competent workers. it is plausible that the new positions for...
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Line 9, column 295, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...difficulty finding jobs that suit them. therefore, the competent workers who were downsiz...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...nnot be generalized as the real action. it is possible that two-thirds companies m...
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Line 13, column 473, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...panies may not pay above average wages. therefore, even if the competent workers get new ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, lastly, may, so, therefore, third, thus, for example, in addition, in brief, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1644.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 315.0 441.139720559 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21904761905 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72703771405 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 204.123752495 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.48253968254 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 506.7 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.5652482062 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.3333333333 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 23.324526521 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.70786347227 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236609177326 0.218282227539 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0821367167028 0.0743258471296 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125599382425 0.0701772020484 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140627160796 0.128457276422 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105631822613 0.0628817314937 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.7 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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