The following appeared in a letter to the editor of Parson City's local newspaper.
"In our region of Trillura, the majority of money spent on the schools that most students attend —
the city-run public schools — comes from taxes that each city government collects.
The region's cities differ, however, in the budgetary priority they give to public education.
For example, both as a proportion of its overall tax revenues and in absolute terms,
Parson City has recently spent almost twice as much per year as Blue City has for its public schools — even though both cities
have about the same number of residents. Clearly, Parson City residents place a higher value on providing a good education in
public schools than Blue City residents do."
According to the letter that appeared to the editor of Parson City's local newspaper, it is stated that the regions of cities differ regarding budgetary priority given to public education. This argument is made based on the assumption that most of the students attend the city-run public school and some examples were shown to support this statement. However, before this statement can be evaluated the following three questions need to be answered.
Firstly, is the authenticity of the statement of attending most of the students- the city-run public school checked? It may possible that there is no report or data that can be used to make this statement that most of the students attend the city-run school, which is funded by government collects. Perhaps, most of the students attend private schools for better opportunities. For example, it can be possible that the students of the Blue city are preferred to join private schools, and so the number of students attending city-run schools is not comparable to Parson city's students. Blue city's residents may have more money to spend
on their children's education. If any of these scenarios are true, then how can anyone say that region's cities differ in the budgetary priority to public education?
Secondly, can it be said that region's cities differ just by comparing the two cities scenarios? It may possible that this region has more cities and Blue city and Parson City is two of them. But based on the scenario of these two cities the whole regions scenario can not be determined. Perhaps, there are more than 10 cities that are spending money for their public schools as Parson city is spending. It can also be possible that the Blue city is already developed and doesn't need more allotment
for their public schools. If any of these cases are true, then it can't be said cities are different.
Thirdly, can it be said that the number of the same residents indicates the same number of students? It can be possible that the number of residents is the same but the number of students is not the same. Perhaps, Blue city has more adult people compared to Parson city. If this is true then less allocation for public schools does not mean that they are different in the context of budgetary priority to public schools. Maybe the ratio of students to the amount of money allocated is the same for
both cities.
Finally, the differences between region's cities are considering a budget allocation to public schools based on some unwanted assumptions. However, this statement can be evaluated if some data or statistical analysis can be provided in the form of a graph or pie chart, any survey data may be a useful source to justify the statement.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 462 350
No. of Characters: 2201 1500
No. of Different Words: 172 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.636 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.764 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.456 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 170 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.173 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.773 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.355 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.547 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.146 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 635, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s residents may have more money to spend on their childrens education. If any of ...
^^^
Line 6, column 248, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'regions'' or 'region's'?
Suggestion: regions'; region's
... scenario of these two cities the whole regions scenario can not be determined. Perhaps...
^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 472, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... the Blue city is already developed and doesnt need more allotment for their public ...
^^^^^^
Line 6, column 498, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...developed and doesnt need more allotment for their public schools. If any of thes...
^^^
Line 7, column 67, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...If any of these cases are true, then it cant be said cities are different. Thirdl...
^^^^
Line 7, column 67, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'cants'?
Suggestion: cants
...If any of these cases are true, then it cant be said cities are different. Thirdl...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 19.6327345309 178% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2253.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 461.0 441.139720559 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88720173536 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54594291482 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.386117136659 0.468620217663 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 701.1 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.8018037602 57.8364921388 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.409090909 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9545454545 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45454545455 5.70786347227 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.385962190106 0.218282227539 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154714837285 0.0743258471296 208% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105749420423 0.0701772020484 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207315587701 0.128457276422 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.123853056488 0.0628817314937 197% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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