The following appeared in a letter to the editor of Parson City's local newspaper.
"In our region of Trillura, the majority of money spent on the schools that most students attend—the city-run public schools—comes from taxes that each city government collects. The region's cities differ, however, in the budgetary priority they give to public education. For example, both as a proportion of its overall tax revenues and in absolute terms, Parson City has recently spent almost twice as much per year as Blue City has for its public schools—even though both cities have about the same number of residents. Clearly, Parson City residents place a higher value on providing a good education in public schools than Blue City residents do."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
According to the author of the passage the majority of the money spent on the schools of a particular region of Trillura are funded by the taxes collected by the respective city government.The author mentions that the each city differ from one another when it comes to prioritizing their budget that needs to be provided to public education.Even though the author strengthens his implication by contrasting the budget allotment towards public education by two cities he fails to provide enough evidence.
The author though he mentions that Parson city spent twice as much as Blue city for its public schools to provide good education he fails to provide enough evidence regarding how exactly is the budget alloted to public schools in the city of Parson is being spent. For an example, There is a possibility that more than half of the money is being invested in sports or other extra-curricular activities which are not actually the part of real education. This possibility might actually make the blue city to focus more on education though it allots less budget to its public schools.
Secondly,The author mentions that the cities of Trillura region varies when it comes to spending money on their public schools by contrasting between the two cities of the region (parson and blue city) but the author fails to provide the evidences regarding such fluctuation between the different cities of same region. The author though he mentions that there are same number of residents in both the cities doesn't provide any statistics about the number of students among these residents. The number of students attending public schools in one city might differ from other city which could be the reason of such variations in allotment of budget by different cities.
In conclusion, we need additional evidence to strengthen or weaken the view point of the author. Regarding this passage, The author needs to provide neccessary statistics of the children who are attending public schools of their cities, How exactly the budget being alloted to public schools by the city-government is being put to use. Provided with all this information it will be possible to understand the reason why the allotment of the money varies from one city to the another.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The author though he mentions that Parson city spent twice as much as Blue city for its public schools to provide good education he fails to provide enough evidence regarding how exactly is the budget alloted to public schools in the city of Parson is being spent.
Error: alloted Suggestion: allowed
Sentence: Regarding this passage, The author needs to provide neccessary statistics of the children who are attending public schools of their cities, How exactly the budget being alloted to public schools by the city-government is being put to use.
Error: alloted Suggestion: allowed
Error: neccessary Suggestion: necessary
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flaws:
Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:
Clearly, Parson City residents place a higher value on providing a good education in public schools than Blue City residents do.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 375 350
No. of Characters: 1850 1500
No. of Different Words: 152 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.401 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.933 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.609 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 147 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34.091 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 20.179 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.431 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.617 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.149 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...ected by the respective city government.The author mentions that the each city diff...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Even
...eeds to be provided to public education.Even though the author strengthens his impli...
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Line 1, column 342, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[2]
Message: “Even though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...eeds to be provided to public education.Even though the author strengthens his implication ...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s he fails to provide enough evidence. The author though he mentions that Parso...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ots less budget to its public schools. Secondly,The author mentions that the ci...
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Line 3, column 15, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , The
...t to its public schools. Secondly,The author mentions that the cities of Tril...
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Line 3, column 206, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ities of the region parson and blue city but the author fails to provide the evid...
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Line 3, column 414, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... number of residents in both the cities doesnt provide any statistics about the number...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lotment of budget by different cities. In conclusion, we need additional eviden...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1873.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 371.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04851752022 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72633748172 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 204.123752495 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.409703504043 0.468620217663 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 580.5 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 22.8473053892 162% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 112.380113899 57.8364921388 194% => OK
Chars per sentence: 187.3 119.503703932 157% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.1 23.324526521 159% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1 5.70786347227 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336010333306 0.218282227539 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.153047933858 0.0743258471296 206% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104804814629 0.0701772020484 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241080726962 0.128457276422 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0554446059014 0.0628817314937 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.9 14.3799401198 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.92 48.3550499002 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 12.197005988 145% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 98.500998004 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 12.3882235529 230% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 16.8 11.1389221557 151% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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