The following appeared in a memo from a vice president of Quiot Manufacturing.
"During the past year, Quiot Manufacturing had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents than at the nearby Panoply Industries plant, where the work shifts are one hour shorter than ours. Experts say that significant contributing factors in many on-the-job accidents are fatigue and sleep deprivation among workers. Therefore, to reduce the number of on-the-job accidents at Quiot and thereby increase productivity, we should shorten each of our three work shifts by one hour so that employees will get adequate amounts of sleep."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author of the passage directly correlates the number of on-the-job accidents that takes place in a workplace to the amount of sleep the workers get.While making this point the author also provides us with an example comparing two industries and reaching to a conclusion from certain assumptions.However, there exists certain logical gaps in these assumptions when scrutinized properly.
Citing the statistics of two manufacturing units the author implies that Quiot manufacturing unit had 30 percent more on-the-job accidents when compared to Panoply Industies plant.Based on this information the author suggests to cut down the number of working hours.However, he fails to take into consideration whether this percentage increase is significant.For example, If the number of accidents taht took place in Panoply Industries are very few then 30% more than that number is quite negligible and need not be taken into consideration.
The author also assumes that as the number of working hours in Panoply industries are minimum, the number of accidents acounted are also minimum and as a result the working hours of Quiot manufacturing should also be minimized but while making this implication he fails to take into consideration the type of work that is being carried out in both these industries.For an example, The Quiot makes use of machines for manufacturing purposes.In such case, The workers who are amatuers might hurt themselves while making use of these machines.On the other hand, The Panoply unit might rely on Man-power which might not lead to accidents due to machines.The author should take these assumptions into considerations before assuming sleep is the only factor for on-the-job accidents.
On the other hand, The author also assumes that when the number of working hours are shortened the number of accidents at the workplace are reduced.But he avoids taking into consderation regarding several number of factors that could possibly affect the capabilities of workers.For an example,There is a possibility that the workers who succumb to these accidents are not very skilled and requires a proper training.Also, The way the workers work is greatly affected by their personal life, their attitude towards the work and many such factors.Without examining other such factors the author hastily argues that the working shifts should be shortened.
In conclusion, There are several assumptions that could seriously undermine the authors argument that more sleep leads to less number of accidents at workplace.In order to agree with the authors point of view there is a need for him/her to address the assumptions that are mentioned above which remain unaddressed by the author.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The author also assumes that as the number of working hours in Panoply industries are minimum, the number of accidents acounted are also minimum and as a result the working hours of Quiot manufacturing should also be minimized but while making this implication he fails to take into consideration the type of work that is being carried out in both these industries.For an example, The Quiot makes use of machines for manufacturing purposes.In such case, The workers who are amatuers might hurt
Error: amatuers Suggestion: amateurs
Error: acounted Suggestion: counted
Sentence: On the other hand, The author also assumes that when the number of working hours are shortened the number of accidents at the workplace are reduced.But he avoids taking into consderation regarding several number of factors that could possibly affect the capabilities of workers.For an example,There is a possibility that the workers who succumb to these accidents are not very skilled and requires a proper training.Also, The way the workers work is greatly affected by their personal life, their
Error: consderation Suggestion: consideration
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flaws:
the three arguments are not exactly right on the point.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 438 350
No. of Characters: 2238 1500
No. of Different Words: 193 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.575 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.11 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.72 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 164 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 126 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 54.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 26.124 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.472 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.777 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.227 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Based
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Suggestion: On
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Suggestion: several numbers
...oids taking into consderation regarding several number of factors that could possibly affect t...
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Suggestion: Without
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, regarding, so, then, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2283.0 2260.96107784 101% => OK
No of words: 422.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40995260664 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09393835944 2.78398813304 111% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46682464455 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 711.0 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 19.7664670659 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 84.0 22.8473053892 368% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 165.186682272 57.8364921388 286% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 456.6 119.503703932 382% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 84.4 23.324526521 362% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 22.0 5.70786347227 385% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.25449101796 381% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178420391811 0.218282227539 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103044849539 0.0743258471296 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0664744464706 0.0701772020484 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103044849539 0.128457276422 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0664744464706 0.0628817314937 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 46.3 14.3799401198 322% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -22.24 48.3550499002 -46% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.1628742515 222% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 37.2 12.197005988 305% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.28 12.5979740519 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.62 8.32208582834 140% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 98.500998004 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.0 12.3882235529 234% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 35.6 11.1389221557 320% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 16.0 11.9071856287 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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