The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a Relannian newspaper.
Industry analysts report that the number of dairy farms in Relanna has increased by 25 percent over the last decade. Also, recent innovations in milking technology make it possible for farmers to significantly increase the efficiency of the milking process, allowing them to collect more milk in less time with minimal human intervention. In fact, data from the Relannian Department of Agriculture indicate that labor costs at the majority of Relannian dairy farms are actually lower now than they were ten years ago. Despite increased efficiency and lower labor costs, a carton of cream — a dairy product made from milk — at the local food market costs twice as much as it did two years ago. The only explanation for this dramatic price increase is that farmers are inflating the price of cream to increase their profits.
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
There are alternative explanations for this dramatic price increase of carton of cream than the explanation presented in the argument which can account for the facts presented in the argument.
First explanation is there maybe less number of cows in the dairy farms. If the new dairy farms have single digit number of cows, then even an increase dairy farms will not give enough amount of milk to make a carton of cream. In this case, they will get less amount of milk to make a carton of cream. As there are less number of cows, the farmers are inflating the price of cream despite increased efficiency and lower labor costs to account for the maintenance costs of their dairy farms. Though the recent innovations in milking technology made it possible for farmers to increase milking efficiency, when there are less number of animals which give milk in their dairy farms, then the innovations would be less useful.
Second explanation is the technology innovations which made milking process easier might have involved a lot of costs for the owners of the dairy farms. Innovation related setup in the dairy farms might have involved higher prices. These innovations involve less human intervention, the dairy farms have increased efficiency and less labor costs now than they were 10 years ago. To account for these innovation related maintenance costs, the dairy farms might have increased the price of a carton of cream.
One of the above explanations can account for why a carton of cream costs twice than it did two years ago despite increased efficiency and less labor costs.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 267 350
No. of Characters: 1295 1500
No. of Different Words: 107 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.042 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.85 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.474 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 74 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 53 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 37 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 28 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.273 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.747 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.364 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.501 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.694 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.248 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 192, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... for the facts presented in the argument First explanation is there maybe less nu...
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Line 5, column 391, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this innovation' or 'these innovations'?
Suggestion: this innovation; these innovations
...n they were 10 years ago To account for these innovation related maintenance costs the dairy far...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, second, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.6327345309 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 28.8173652695 35% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1307.0 2260.96107784 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 267.0 441.139720559 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89513108614 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47383876639 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 102.0 204.123752495 50% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.38202247191 0.468620217663 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 409.5 705.55239521 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 19.7664670659 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 267.0 22.8473053892 1169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 57.8364921388 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1307.0 119.503703932 1094% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 267.0 23.324526521 1145% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 28.0 5.70786347227 491% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 8.20758483034 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199856489179 0.218282227539 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.199856489179 0.0743258471296 269% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0701772020484 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108467225824 0.128457276422 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0941417755077 0.0628817314937 150% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 135.1 14.3799401198 940% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -191.07 48.3550499002 -395% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.1628742515 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 106.2 12.197005988 871% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.62 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 19.01 8.32208582834 228% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 36.0 98.500998004 37% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 55.0 12.3882235529 444% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 108.8 11.1389221557 977% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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