The following appeared in a letter to the editor of a Relannian newspaper.
Industry analysts report that the number of dairy farms in Relanna has increased by 25 percent over the last decade. Also, recent innovations in milking technology make it possible for farmers to significantly increase the efficiency of the milking process, allowing them to collect more milk in less time with minimal human intervention. In fact, data from the Relannian Department of Agriculture indicate that labor costs at the majority of Relannian dairy farms are actually lower now than they were ten years ago. Despite increased efficiency and lower labor costs, a carton of cream — a dairy product made from milk — at the local food market costs twice as much as it did two years ago. The only explanation for this dramatic price increase is that farmers are inflating the price of cream to increase their profits.
In the editor it is stated that farmers are increasing the price of cream to increase their profits as price of dairy product is increasing. To support this idea industry analysts cite the following facts like over the last decade dairy farm has increased. Also milking process became easier so less human intervention is needed. Also labour cost has been reduced now. Despite increase efficiency and low labor cost price of dairy products are twice than two years ago. However, due to lack of logical explanation this standpoint doers not seem valid for some reasons.
First of all, industrial analysists stated cost of the firm may be increased over this long period. Also on order to buy the new technologies firm owners have to invest a huge fixed cost that the dairy farms are increasing over last two decades. However, in this long period the demand of dairy products may have also increased that somehow balanced the supply and demand system. So increasing dairy farms can not be a reason of increased supply of dairy products.
Secondly, industrial analysists mentioned that miking process need less human intervention and for this reason cost has been decreased. But it can be possible that the other cost like food cost of animals, maintenance. So if either of this scenarios has merit, then conclusion drawn in the argument is significantly weakened.
Even if the analysts can substantiate the foregoing assumptions, they overlook the possibility that the transportation system may have become costly than before. For this reason the suppliers may have increased the price of dairy foods. So the farmers can not be suspected for this price increase of the dairy products. If this is true then the argum ent does not hold water.
In conclusion, this argument, as it stands now, is flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. The analysts need to substantiate this facts with logical explanation. After that this argument can be evaluated properly.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 326 350
No. of Characters: 1617 1500
No. of Different Words: 161 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.249 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.96 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.617 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 107 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 79 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.3 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.216 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.311 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.431 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.057 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
In the editor it is stated that farmers ...
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Line 2, column 258, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...e last decade dairy farm has increased. Also milking process became easier so less h...
^^^^
Line 2, column 331, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...r so less human intervention is needed. Also labour cost has been reduced now. Despi...
^^^^
Line 3, column 101, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...may be increased over this long period. Also on order to buy the new technologies fi...
^^^^
Line 4, column 236, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...f animals, maintenance. So if either of this scenarios has merit, then conclusion dr...
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Line 6, column 322, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s price increase of the dairy products. If this is true then the argum ent does no...
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Line 8, column 150, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ions. The analysts need to substantiate this facts with logical explanation. After t...
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Line 8, column 187, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...te this facts with logical explanation. After that this argument can be evaluated pro...
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Line 10, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... argument can be evaluated properly.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1673.0 2260.96107784 74% => OK
No of words: 326.0 441.139720559 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13190184049 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70996428617 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503067484663 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.8013338143 57.8364921388 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 83.65 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3 23.324526521 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85 5.70786347227 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189265749824 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0645276030558 0.0743258471296 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0655892201381 0.0701772020484 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106291275918 0.128457276422 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0819945381798 0.0628817314937 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 12.3882235529 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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