The following appeared in a letter from a homeowner to a friend."Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom

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The following appeared in a letter from a homeowner to a friend.
"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty."

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

The author of the argument has failed to convince as that Adam’s Realty is more promising than Filch’s Realty, with respect to how quickly they sell homes. The argument, as it stands, is based on questionable assumptions and a faulty line of reasoning, a fact which renders it over-simplistic and unconvincing.

To begin with, the author, in order to convince us, claims that Adam’s Realty service is much faster than those of Fitch. To elucidate on, the speaker mentions that ten years ago, selling a house took four months for Fitch, but last year the same job took only one month for Adams. To further scrutinize, the arguer does not take into account that so many things could change after ten years. What if ten years ago the Realty Market for selling a house was not good? So many other factors could be involved. What if Fitch, 10 years ago, used to have a less skilled team than today? but today he can make a sell in no time. What if Adam just got lucky once? The author fails to consider the fact that things change over time. The argument would have been strengthened if the speaker had provided enough evidence for his assertion. To sum up, the author fails to provide justification for his assertion.

Next, the arguer uses numbers to persuade us that Adam’s revenue was much higher than those of Fitch’s. Although plausible, but there is no direct link between the price of home sales and the retailer’s revenue. To elaborate, the author flimsily assumes that the higher the average price of homes sold, the higher is the total revenue. What if Adam, by himself sold only 10 houses with the average price of the $168,000 and Fitch’s average was $144,000 for 100 houses in a year? The author should have, elaborated more detail and a concrete link between the numbers provided and his assertion. If so, the argument would have been convincing.

Finally, the author states that Fitch’s team consist of 25 people who are working part-time, but Adam’s team consist of 40 people. Not mentioning the fact that the author does not provide any further detail about Adam’s Realty team, he uses the part-time issue as a red herring to convince the reader that Adam is more promising that Fitch. In addition, it could be said that the quantity does not weigh over quality. Consequently, it does not mean that just because Fitch’s team are lower in number they are not as productive as Adam’s. What if Fitch’s team have a team-work spirit that Adam’s crave for? Therefore, they can get the job done really quicker and with a higher quality. The author should have mentioned other factors related, for the argument to be strengthened.

To conclude, based on substantial assumptions and poor evidence, the arguer’s reasoning does not provide concrete support for his/her conclusion. If the argument had included the items discussed, it would have been more thorough and convincing.

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Average: 7.5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 288, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...same job took only one month for Adams. To further scrutinize, the arguer does not...
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Line 3, column 588, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...to have a less skilled team than today? but today he can make a sell in no time. Wh...
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Line 5, column 631, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had been'?
Suggestion: had been
... and his assertion. If so, the argument would have been convincing. Finally, the author stat...
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Line 7, column 505, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: lower
...that just because Fitch's team are lower in number they are not as productive as Adam&apos...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'consequently', 'finally', 'if', 'really', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'in addition', 'to begin with', 'to sum up', 'with respect to']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.238172920065 0.25644967241 93% => OK
Verbs: 0.151712887439 0.15541462614 98% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0766721044046 0.0836205057962 92% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0489396411093 0.0520304965353 94% => OK
Pronouns: 0.026101141925 0.0272364105082 96% => OK
Prepositions: 0.10766721044 0.125424944231 86% => OK
Participles: 0.0391517128874 0.0416121511921 94% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.72589517774 2.79052419416 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0244698205546 0.026700313972 92% => OK
Particles: 0.00163132137031 0.001811407834 90% => OK
Determiners: 0.0929853181077 0.113004496875 82% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0163132137031 0.0255425247493 64% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0163132137031 0.0127820249294 128% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2964.0 2731.13054187 109% => OK
No of words: 496.0 446.07635468 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.97580645161 6.12365571057 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71922212354 4.57801047555 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.344758064516 0.378187486979 91% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.239919354839 0.287650121315 83% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.161290322581 0.208842608468 77% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.10685483871 0.135150697306 79% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72589517774 2.79052419416 98% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 207.018472906 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475806451613 0.469332199767 101% => OK
Word variations: 54.9087075505 52.1807786196 105% => OK
How many sentences: 26.0 20.039408867 130% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0769230769 23.2022227129 82% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.1001760659 57.7814097925 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.0 141.986410481 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0769230769 23.2022227129 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.461538461538 0.724660767414 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.58251231527 112% => OK
Readability: 43.0688585608 51.9672348444 83% => OK
Elegance: 1.69784172662 1.8405768891 92% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279735057897 0.441005458295 63% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.097241833112 0.135418324435 72% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0851938411057 0.0829849096947 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.478346633719 0.58762219726 81% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.177374659127 0.147661913831 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0965274224309 0.193483328276 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0567999108503 0.0970749176394 59% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.354635189719 0.42659136922 83% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0821738113171 0.0774707102158 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185529020846 0.312017818177 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0455636819491 0.0698173142475 65% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.33743842365 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.87684729064 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.82512315271 187% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 6.0 6.46551724138 93% => OK
Negative topic words: 9.0 5.36822660099 168% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.82389162562 177% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 14.657635468 136% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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