The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex to its manager.
"One month ago, all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. Clearly, modifying showerheads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the Sunnyside Towers complex will increase our profits further."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The owner of the Sunnyside Towers claims that by modifying the showerheads, they can restrict the waterflow and increase profits from them. Stated in this way, the argument failed to mention several key factors on the basis of which it could be evaluated. To justify this argument, the owner reasons that restriction of water flow could reduce the water usage and saves money which they're paying to the corporation. However, careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals that it provides little creditable support to owner's argument. Hence the argument can be considered as incomplete or unsubstantiated.
First of all, just by changing the showerheads of 3 buildings, the owner assums that the water can be saved at a large extent without even carefuly examining the usage of water before and after chaning of showeheads. May be the water usage increases after changing the showerheads. We don't really know. Even though the water is saved by modifying the showerhead, it's maintainance cost should be considered. For instance, if the maintainance cost is higher and it provides a little profit after saving water from all buildings, then it provides only a little creditable support of owners claim and thus seems unpersuasive. Hence, a detailed analysis of water usage and maintainance cost of changing showerheads should be done by the owner before taking the decision of changing the showerheads.
Furthermore, there are various other factors which could increase the funding of the owner like increasing the maintainance cost by providing various facilities like Gym, swimming pool, clubhouse, garden etc. Since these are the adequate factors which would definitely increase the profits for owner. Apart from that, it could be possible that the water is available freely in the society due to availability of nearby river. Hence, saving the water and making the profit would be unpersuasive in that case. Hence, some more information should be given by the owner about the profits which could be make by saving water and compare them with profits after creation of above facilities.
At last, the owner should devote some more time for analysis of water usage before and after changing of showerheads of the buildings. Since one month is not enough time to evaluate the faults in changing of showerheads. May be possible that after some years there would be some water leakage in most apartments due to changing of showerheads and will cause some more amount of money to repair them. Thus, considering these things should help the author to better think about whether the modification of showerheads would really benefited or not-
In conclusion, the owner's argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it further, the owner must provide better concrete evidences, perhaps by a way of reliable survey about the profits from saving water. Finally, to better assess the argument, it would be necessary to know about other factors which would be considered as cheep and further make much profits than changing of showerheads.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: First of all, just by changing the showerheads of 3 buildings, the owner assums that the water can be saved at a large extent without even carefuly examining the usage of water before and after chaning of showeheads.
Error: chaning Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: showeheads Suggestion: showered
Error: assums Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: carefuly Suggestion: careful
Sentence: Even though the water is saved by modifying the showerhead, it's maintainance cost should be considered.
Error: maintainance Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: showerhead Suggestion: showered
Sentence: For instance, if the maintainance cost is higher and it provides a little profit after saving water from all buildings, then it provides only a little creditable support of owners claim and thus seems unpersuasive.
Error: maintainance Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Hence, a detailed analysis of water usage and maintainance cost of changing showerheads should be done by the owner before taking the decision of changing the showerheads.
Error: maintainance Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Furthermore, there are various other factors which could increase the funding of the owner like increasing the maintainance cost by providing various facilities like Gym, swimming pool, clubhouse, garden etc. Since these are the adequate factors which would definitely increase the profits for owner.
Error: maintainance Suggestion: No alternate word
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- duplicated to argument 1
argument 3 -- not OK. Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:
Clearly, modifying showerheads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the Sunnyside Towers complex will increase our profits further.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 493 350
No. of Characters: 2490 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.712 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.051 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.654 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 176 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 128 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.409 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.759 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.682 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.338 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.54 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.124 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 383, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: they're
...e the water usage and saves money which theyre paying to the corporation. However, car...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 530, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... creditable support to owners argument. Hence the argument can be considered as incom...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 222, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...re and after chaning of showeheads. May be the water usage increases after changin...
^^
Line 3, column 286, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ases after changing the showerheads. We dont really know. Even though the water is s...
^^^^
Line 7, column 136, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...anging of showerheads of the buildings. Since one month is not enough time to evaluat...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 20, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'owners'' or 'owner's'?
Suggestion: owners'; owner's
...benefited or not- In conclusion, the owners argument is unpersuasive as it stands. ...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 354, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...be considered as cheep and further make much profits than changing of showerheads.
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, really, so, then, thus, apart from, for instance, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.9520958084 178% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 55.5748502994 140% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2548.0 2260.96107784 113% => OK
No of words: 491.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18940936864 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74693854534 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446028513238 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 793.8 705.55239521 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.0367949328 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.818181818 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3181818182 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95454545455 5.70786347227 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149001618833 0.218282227539 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0536675946356 0.0743258471296 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497708904812 0.0701772020484 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0898833264211 0.128457276422 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0370568992545 0.0628817314937 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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