The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex to its manager.
"One month ago, all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. I predict that modifying showerheads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the Sunnyside Towers complex will increase our profits even more dramatically."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The claim of the owner of the sunnyside towers appartment complex is that, decreasing the pressure of the showerhead of his twelve buildings will get him more profit than before. There are many fallacies in the passage that is not represented clearly to evaluate his statement. Without those evidence, we are kept in an amvibalent state to be duboius about his goal to profit. Among those fallacies, three reasons can be described here.
Firstly, it is said that, actual reading of water usage before the adjustment of showerhead is not recorded. Again, reading of water usage after the adjustment of showerhead is also not recorded. That means, it was assumed by the owner that, people living in those buildings use water relentlessly only by shower. Maybe vast amount of water is used to wash the building enviroment and keep proper maintenance which is not done now.He also assumed that, by adjusting the showerhead, he is getting more savings from that building.There is not any data provided to the owner by observing which, he can surely esmitate the usage of water. Without the record, effect of any operation will come to no use.
Secondly, getting more savings from the previous month, the owner is giving credit to the idea of adjusting showerhead. Maybe in that month, there was less number of people living in their own apartment. Mabe, they have gone to any vacation, for which amount of water usage was less than the previous month. The owner is assuming by the savings getting only from first month. The savings he got maybe because of other causes also. Because it is not said that the savings is only from the water usage. Distribution of cost and profit of other utilities of the building are not mentioned here, by comparing which the this assumption can be taken.Before taking any decision about change of anything, survey must be done for a long time. Taking decision by evaluating only one sample of data is unwise. Being an owner of a tower complex, he should have been known it.
In the final statement, the owner is aiming to adjust the showerhead of his other buldings also by seeing the savings from one paricular building. But, there is no aformantioned data of those people living in the building that, whether they use most of their usage water from showerhead or not. It may the case that, they do not use shower at all or use most of the usage water by any other tap than shower. Again whether the usage of water in those buildings are making less profits or not is not mentioned here. Usage of water can be varied building to building. By evaluating only one sample data, it is very unwise to claim that, by applying the same formula on ther building will bring the same profit or same savings.
In conclusion, the arguement as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance on unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to answer all three questions above and offer more evidence , then it will be possible to fully evaluate the validity of the proposed claim that can be applied without any further investigation.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 14 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 535 350
No. of Characters: 2469 1500
No. of Different Words: 220 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.809 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.615 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.414 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 157 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.577 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.821 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.423 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.297 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.487 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.127 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 433, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: He
...roper maintenance which is not done now.He also assumed that, by adjusting the sho...
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Line 3, column 530, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: There
...getting more savings from that building.There is not any data provided to the owner b...
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Line 3, column 576, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...is not any data provided to the owner by observing which, he can surely esmitate ...
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Line 5, column 427, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...gs he got maybe because of other causes also. Because it is not said that the saving...
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Line 5, column 433, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...got maybe because of other causes also. Because it is not said that the savings is only...
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Line 5, column 613, Rule ID: DT_DT[2]
Message: Maybe you need to remove the second determiner so that only 'the' or 'this' is left.
Suggestion: the; this
... not mentioned here, by comparing which the this assumption can be taken.Before taking a...
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Line 5, column 646, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Before
... which the this assumption can be taken.Before taking any decision about change of any...
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Line 7, column 473, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun profits is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... of water in those buildings are making less profits or not is not mentioned here. U...
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Line 9, column 201, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... questions above and offer more evidence , then it will be possible to fully evalu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 36.0 19.6327345309 183% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 28.8173652695 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 55.5748502994 148% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2549.0 2260.96107784 113% => OK
No of words: 532.0 441.139720559 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79135338346 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80261649409 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54426853547 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 204.123752495 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.43984962406 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 818.1 705.55239521 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 4.96107784431 242% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.0561518009 57.8364921388 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0384615385 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4615384615 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.96153846154 5.70786347227 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.67664670659 321% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205385909826 0.218282227539 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0617292711317 0.0743258471296 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513031887735 0.0701772020484 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112288194147 0.128457276422 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0414324321063 0.0628817314937 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.5979740519 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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