The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a food distribution company with food storage warehouses in several cities Recently we signed a contract with the Fly Away Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our fast food w

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The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a food distribution company with food storage warehouses in several cities.

"Recently, we signed a contract with the Fly-Away Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our fast-food warehouse in Palm City, but last month we discovered that over $20,000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Meanwhile, the Buzzoff Pest Control Company, which we have used for many years, continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, and last month only $10,000 worth of the food stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. Even though the price charged by Fly-Away is considerably lower, our best means of saving money is to return to Buzzoff for all our pest control services."

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

In this argument the vice president of the food distribution company is wishing to return back to the buzzoff pest control service who worth them less damage than the curent pest control company. Behind taking this decision he assumed too many steps that are wanting in evidence without which kept us in an ambivalent state to agree with him in all respect. Some of the fallacies are presented here.

Firstly, the new company named the fly away pest control company they contacted with is seen not to give good service. A reason is provided here that, last moth they faced $20,000 worth of food damaged. But there is no data or evidence is shown here behind it. Again, The warehouse that is in wintervale, shows less damage than other in the palm city for only just one moth. And by seeing this one month expenditure the vice president of the company is coming into direct conclusion. It is unwise to make such a big decision for only surveying one month data. The sample size of any survey must be large before taking any kind of decision or before changing it.

Secondly, the two warehouse in which one of them are in palm city and another one is situated in Wintervale. Are these two warehouse really comparable with each other or not is not presented here clearly. Maybe they preserve different kind of foods. Maybe in palm city warehouse the food that were preserved were outdated or such a product that can be rotten at any moment. What quantity of food is preserved in the wintervale one is also not mentioned here. Maybe the food reserved there were too less than the other. Before claiming this state that the other ware house in winterscale let them damage than the other is quite irrelevant if there is no parameter between them by which we can compare them.

Furthermore, by seeing this two companys' service at pest control, the vice president of the food company is wishing to getting back to the company that they contracted with their wintervale company. But as a president of a company, his main target is surely to earn maximum profit as possible from this warehouses. Then why not the president is seeking for a third company? Because the wintervale one also cannot provide him zero damage. Again, another thing can be questioned here that, the refrigeration capacity of those warehouses are fulfilled or not. Preserving food in any warehouses, maintenance of weather and moisture control is a must. If there is no sufficient equipment that must be present in any food reserving warehouse, then damage is must. No pest control service can minimize this damage whatever procedure they applied here.

In conclusion, the argument as it is stated now, is flawed with different assumptions. If the author of the passage can show the evidence and answer those reasons completely, then it will be possible to be agree with his statement to return back to the Buzzoff pest control service.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 71, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...sident of the food distribution company is wishing to return back to the buzzoff pest cont...
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Line 2, column 85, Rule ID: RETURN_BACK[1]
Message: Use simply 'return'.
Suggestion: return
...food distribution company is wishing to return back to the buzzoff pest control service who...
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Line 2, column 257, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
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...decision he assumed too many steps that are wanting in evidence without which kept us in an...
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Line 2, column 360, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
...state to agree with him in all respect. Some of the fallacies are presented here. First...
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Line 4, column 641, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...ge before taking any kind of decision or before changing it. Secondly, the t...
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...en them by which we can compare them. Furthermore, by seeing this two companys...
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Line 8, column 107, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
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Line 8, column 300, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
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...to earn maximum profit as possible from this warehouses. Then why not the president ...
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Line 8, column 376, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...esident is seeking for a third company? Because the wintervale one also cannot provide ...
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Line 10, column 236, Rule ID: RETURN_BACK[1]
Message: Use simply 'return'.
Suggestion: return
...sible to be agree with his statement to return back to the Buzzoff pest control service.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, third, another thing, in conclusion, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 36.0 19.6327345309 183% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 28.8173652695 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2416.0 2260.96107784 107% => OK
No of words: 502.0 441.139720559 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81274900398 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51222625839 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 204.123752495 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454183266932 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 782.1 705.55239521 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.9644578432 57.8364921388 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.4814814815 119.503703932 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5925925926 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.77777777778 5.70786347227 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.329494687063 0.218282227539 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0851016025694 0.0743258471296 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0962200462105 0.0701772020484 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192687678556 0.128457276422 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0745390423588 0.0628817314937 119% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.3799401198 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.5979740519 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 10 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 27 15
No. of Words: 502 350
No. of Characters: 2351 1500
No. of Different Words: 220 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.733 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.683 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.44 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 159 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 123 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.593 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.776 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.593 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.273 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.449 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.082 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5