The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex to its manager.
"One month ago, all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. I predict that modifying showerheads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the Sunnyside Towers complex will increase our profits even more dramatically."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.
The prompt supports the idea that restricting water flow throughout all the twelve buildings will help the owner of the apartments to gain more profits as sampled from their expereince of the first theree buildings. Although the owner tried to provide necessary insights of his logics in the prompt, however much of the logical flaws are inflicted within the premises of the arguments; which are to be mentioned followed by clarifications.
To begin with - the concept that there will be sufficeint saving in the water consumption as well as in the costs with respect to conjectures might not be a good one to have. There is no guarantee that the water flow level will change after the implications; at least nothing has mentioned in the prompt regarding that. It is assumed that as the corporation will benefit from the less usage of water by the dwellers; from which they can gain extra profits by maintaining the same cost even after the modifications. But is there surity that the water will not be spared by the residents in otehr purposes? For example - dwellers of that complex apartments might not complain about the less water flow but have started to use more water for different chores and domestic purposes. Might be the case that the residents are not satisfied with the less waterflow and are consuming more water than before for serving it later. May be in those cases - the ultimate plan of the owner might be overhaul to a failed one.
Another assumption of the owner which is somewhat complimentary to the formerly mentioned one, is that - whether or not - any kind of complaint has been filed or not; the passage does not provide clear concept of this. If no sufficient complains are filed against this restrained water flow then the residents might not have difficulties to deal with. However, if there are any, may be in the coming days, then- it might force the owner to change it into previous form. Apart from that - it might not presumptuous to expect that the water level and availability of water for the residents might not be same althroughout the year. May be in the winter days the water might flow even slower than before because of caught up in the form of ice. In that times - complains might be surged against the restrained water flow. Then the owner might have to force the change into the maximum one, let alone thinking about making profits.
Also important to mention that - the owner is hoping that - as there is no problem, as far as the residents' concern over the slow flow in the three building, so they can imply the same strategy for the other twelve buildings. However, before complying this the owner must be sure about some factors. What if it is found out that the restrained flow of water is much more slower than he expected in the twelve building? Might be the case that people of one building are using more water than other and so the slower flow is actually causing problems for them. The pipes or the paths or the junctures the water will follow for the transportation might not be equally effective for all the buildings - some of those may be still robust or some of those might be very fragile; in which cases the slower flow will be even slower. If these factors are not considered properly then there might be good chance of getting complains against this slow flow of water in showerheads while all the implimentions for the twelve buildings are done. In that case the owner may not able to extract profits as he previously cherished.
So, looking at all the factors and points aforementioned, it can be safely said that - without sufficient measures and assurance - it might not be good for the owner to implicate the same for the twelve buildings as he had done for the other threes. However, to come to a certain conclusion - he has to answer the asked questions in the essay with proper evidences.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 676 350
No. of Characters: 3116 1500
No. of Different Words: 264 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.099 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.609 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.456 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 180 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 137 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 67 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.04 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.664 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.88 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.337 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.504 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.134 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 926, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...r than before for serving it later. May be in those cases - the ultimate plan of t...
^^
Line 5, column 106, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...o the formerly mentioned one, is that - whether or not - any kind of complaint has been filed ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 220, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...does not provide clear concept of this. If no sufficient complains are filed again...
^^
Line 5, column 635, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
... not be same althroughout the year. May be in the winter days the water might flow...
^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...alone thinking about making profits. Also important to mention that - the owner i...
^^^^
Line 7, column 367, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'slower' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: slower
...at the restrained flow of water is much more slower than he expected in the twelve building...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, look, may, regarding, so, still, then, well, while, apart from, as to, at least, for example, in conclusion, kind of, as well as, to begin with, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 40.0 19.6327345309 204% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 32.0 12.9520958084 247% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 13.6137724551 162% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 28.8173652695 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 90.0 55.5748502994 162% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3188.0 2260.96107784 141% => OK
No of words: 676.0 441.139720559 153% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71597633136 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.09901951359 4.56307096286 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53876482449 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 204.123752495 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.408284023669 0.468620217663 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 976.5 705.55239521 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.4128212377 57.8364921388 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.52 119.503703932 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.04 23.324526521 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.04 5.70786347227 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167029901369 0.218282227539 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0593916892707 0.0743258471296 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.036809895248 0.0701772020484 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107710256123 0.128457276422 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0377220042135 0.0628817314937 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 48.3550499002 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 98.500998004 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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