The following appeared in a letter to the school board in the town of Centerville All students should be required to take the driver s education course at Centerville High School In the past two years several accidents in and around Centerville have invol

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The following appeared in a letter to the school board in the town of Centerville.
"All students should be required to take the driver's education course at Centerville High School. In the past two years, several accidents in and around Centerville have involved teenage drivers. Since a number of parents in Centerville have complained that they are too busy to teach their teenagers to drive, some other instruction is necessary to ensure that these teenagers are safe drivers. Although there are two driving schools in Centerville, parents on a tight budget cannot afford to pay for driving instruction. Therefore an effective and mandatory program sponsored by the high school is the only solution to this serious problem."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

In the above letter, the author states that in order to balloon students’ safety Centerville high school should require to mandate a mandatory driving program for all of its students. The author supports his argument based on the premise that over the past two years the number of accidents involving teenager was increased around Centerville. Furthermore, the author supports his argument by adding that parents of the students are too busy to teach their children to drive and they can not afford to send their children to driving schools. However, before evaluating the author’s argument three questions need to be answered.

Firstly, the author states about the increasing number of accidents involving teenagers around Centerville without any justifiable evidence about how many students of the Centerville high schools were involved in those accidents. There is a possibility that though the number of accidents increased over the past two years around Centerville, only 2 students of the school were injured. Maybe most of the teenagers who were involved in those accidents were not school students. Even if this is not the case, maybe there are other reasons such as poor road conditions and poor traffic management, behind the accidents. If any one of the above scenarios is true then the author’s argument holds no water. The author did not provide any admissible evidence regarding the cause of the accidents or how many teenagers in the school were affected by those accidents. If the author can provide more evidence regarding the other factors for the road accidents then, it will be possible to evaluate the author’s arguments to a certain extent.
Secondly, the author states that since the parents can not afford to pay for the driving schools, the schools should mandatory driving program for every student in the Centerville school without providing any necessitate evidence. A reader may raise questions about the necessity of the driving lessons or should driving lessons will be effective for the students. There is a possibility that most of the students reside 2 miles from the school and usually, they commute by bus. In that case, giving driving lessons will not be helpful at all and most parents may not agree with the idea that driving lesson is necessary for the safety of their children. Even if this is not the case, after learning driving there is no guarantee that students will drive carefully, in that case giving driving lesson may exacerbate the situation and will significantly hamper the student safety standards. If anyone of the above situation is true then the author’s argument is built unreliably. If the author is able to provide more evidence regarding parents' suggestions about the safety measure taken by the schools, the author may have strengthened his argument.
Thirdly, the author states that mandatory driving lesson is the only way to reduce accidents without any justifiable evidence. A reader may ask questions about the efficacy of the proposed solution. In other words, is providing driving lessons the only solution for reducing accidents? There is a possibility that after learning driving most of the students will drive recklessly and may cause more accidents in the near future. Maybe the traffic condition in the nearby area of Centeville is too bad for an apprentice student driver to drive safely. In that case, the author’s argument is seriously unwarranted. The author did not provide any justifiable evidence regarding the safety measures of the students after learning to drive. Perhaps providing a bus for commutating will be a more veritable solution against the increasing number of accidents involving teenagers. If the author provides more evidence perhaps in the form of a survey about the safety standards to rectify his argument, then it will strengthen the author’s argument.
In the conclusion, the author’s argument that stands now is seriously flawed due to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author can answer the three questions above and offer more evidence(perhaps in the form of a systematic research study) then, it will be possible to evaluate the proposed recommendation that an effective and mandatory program sponsored by the high school will enhance the students' safety.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 462, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'schooled'.
Suggestion: schooled
...re involved in those accidents were not school students. Even if this is not the case,...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 619, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...affic management, behind the accidents. If any one of the above scenarios is true ...
^^
Line 4, column 420, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ibility that most of the students reside 2 miles from the school and usually, the...
^^
Line 4, column 701, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to drive'.
Suggestion: to drive
...if this is not the case, after learning driving there is no guarantee that students wil...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 891, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ly hamper the student safety standards. If anyone of the above situation is true t...
^^
Line 5, column 330, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to drive'.
Suggestion: to drive
...re is a possibility that after learning driving most of the students will drive reckles...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, such as, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.9520958084 185% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 95.0 55.5748502994 171% => OK
Nominalization: 28.0 16.3942115768 171% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3617.0 2260.96107784 160% => OK
No of words: 690.0 441.139720559 156% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24202898551 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.12521717326 4.56307096286 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76816184801 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 204.123752495 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.35652173913 0.468620217663 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1129.5 705.55239521 160% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 2.70958083832 369% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 19.7664670659 147% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.5140196329 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.724137931 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7931034483 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.31034482759 5.70786347227 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180850569151 0.218282227539 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0581163446513 0.0743258471296 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670336481567 0.0701772020484 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12152327523 0.128457276422 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0544734756237 0.0628817314937 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 98.500998004 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Write the essay in 30 minutes.

Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 462, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'schooled'.
Suggestion: schooled
...re involved in those accidents were not school students. Even if this is not the case,...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 619, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...affic management, behind the accidents. If any one of the above scenarios is true ...
^^
Line 4, column 420, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ibility that most of the students reside 2 miles from the school and usually, the...
^^
Line 4, column 701, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to drive'.
Suggestion: to drive
...if this is not the case, after learning driving there is no guarantee that students wil...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 891, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ly hamper the student safety standards. If anyone of the above situation is true t...
^^
Line 5, column 330, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to drive'.
Suggestion: to drive
...re is a possibility that after learning driving most of the students will drive reckles...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, such as, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.9520958084 185% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 95.0 55.5748502994 171% => OK
Nominalization: 28.0 16.3942115768 171% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3617.0 2260.96107784 160% => OK
No of words: 690.0 441.139720559 156% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24202898551 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.12521717326 4.56307096286 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76816184801 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 204.123752495 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.35652173913 0.468620217663 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1129.5 705.55239521 160% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 2.70958083832 369% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 19.7664670659 147% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.5140196329 57.8364921388 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.724137931 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7931034483 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.31034482759 5.70786347227 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180850569151 0.218282227539 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0581163446513 0.0743258471296 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670336481567 0.0701772020484 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12152327523 0.128457276422 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0544734756237 0.0628817314937 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 98.500998004 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Write the essay in 30 minutes.

Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.