The following appeared in a letter to the school board in the town of Centerville.
All students should be required to take the driver's education course at Centerville High School. In the past two years, several accidents in and around Centerville have involved teenage drivers. Since a number of parents in Centerville have complained that they are too busy to teach their teenagers to drive, some other instruction is necessary to ensure that these teenagers are safe drivers. Although there are two driving schools in Centerville, parents on a tight budget cannot afford to pay for driving instruction. Therefore an effective and mandatory program sponsored by the high school is the only solution to this serious problem.
In this argument, the author claims that all students should be required to take the driver's education course at Centerville High School. There seems to be some validity at first glance, but we immediately found out several logical mistakes throughout the whole article. My reasons can be substantiated by the incoming comments:
To begin with, the says that several accidents in and around Centerville have involved teenage drivers. However, we do not know how serious the accidents are. Were the people killed or severely injured? If the accidents were not serious, it is not worthwhile to run the education course to all the students. Thus, we need to know whether the accidents were all serious and have needs to blame the teenagers.
Furthermore, the author make an assumption that parents in Centerville cannot afford to pay for driving instruction. However, we need to know how exactly the number of the payments of driving schools, and how they perceive the needs to educate their children. If the parents consider it essential to offer their children the instruction. Maybe they will pay for the courses.
Finally, the author assume that the only solution to this serious problem is to sponsor an effective and mandatory program by the school. Nevertheless, there are several alternative solutions that need to be explored. For example, if the problem is due to the some specific behaviors such as speeding or drink, more rigorous law will be more powerful than the driving course.
To sum up, the author would have to provide more evidence in detail to make valid assumptions he provided. Without such evidence, we cannot jump to the conclusion that all students should be required to take the driver's education course at Centerville High School. All in all, if the author provides more evidence and mends the mistakes, then the article will be more persuasive.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 309 350
No. of Characters: 1526 1500
No. of Different Words: 157 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.193 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.939 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.606 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 120 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 95 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.167 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.318 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.722 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.303 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.558 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.11 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 86, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'drivers'' or 'driver's'?
Suggestion: drivers'; driver's
...students should be required to take the drivers education course at Centerville High Sc...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 261, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ve the needs to educate their children. If the parents consider it essential to of...
^^
Line 13, column 261, Rule ID: THE_SOME_DAY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'same'?
Suggestion: same
...r example, if the problem is due to the some specific behaviors such as speeding or ...
^^^^
Line 17, column 213, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'drivers'' or 'driver's'?
Suggestion: drivers'; driver's
...students should be required to take the drivers education course at Centerville High Sc...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, then, thus, while, for example, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1586.0 2260.96107784 70% => OK
No of words: 309.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13268608414 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71121707811 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511326860841 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 705.55239521 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.0207113845 57.8364921388 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2941176471 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1764705882 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94117647059 5.70786347227 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258138686433 0.218282227539 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0858895844178 0.0743258471296 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123802406772 0.0701772020484 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146736537473 0.128457276422 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0977506782472 0.0628817314937 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.3799401198 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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