The following appeared in a letter to the school board in the town of Centerville."All students should be required to take the driver's education course at Centerville High School. In the past two years, several accidents in and around Centerville have in

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The following appeared in a letter to the school board in the town of Centerville.

"All students should be required to take the driver's education course at Centerville High School. In the past two years, several accidents in and around Centerville have involved teenage drivers. Since a number of parents in Centerville have complained that they are too busy to teach their teenagers to drive, some other instruction is necessary to ensure that these teenagers are safe drivers. Although there are two driving schools in Centerville, parents on a tight budget cannot afford to pay for driving instruction. Therefore an effective and mandatory program sponsored by the high school is the only solution to this serious problem."

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

The sender of this letter has recommended the school board in the town of Centerville to make driving a mandatory course program - sponsered by the high school, not by themselves. He strived to shore up his argument by citing that in the past two years several accidents were observed - especially relating to the teenager drivers. Although the premises supplied by the sender of this letter might be credible, the assumption and the finally derived conclusion are utterly skeptical due to lack of many hard facts in this letter.

In the letter, the sender explicitly mentions that in the past couple of years, several accidents in and around the Centerville have teenager drivers. Nevertheless, he has not accorded the necessary information about several factors - like status of road in the Centerville, traffic rules, status of vehicles etc. Without information about these issues, it is really challenging to make any adjudication. There may be a situation, for example, where parents ride new vehicles and the children are given with the old vehicles; in this context, the higher accidents related to teenager is obvious. Similarly, it not fair to blame only teenagers for the accidents; unmaintained roads, improper traffic management might also be the reasons of those accidents. Clearly, for a robust argument the sender of this letter should supply the answer of question like " What is the status of the road in the Centerville?.

Similarly, the sender has not supplied any information about high schools' financial, or other, strength to conduct such program. There might be a situation where the schools can't run such programs, or won't show interest to conduct program. Without knowing the sentiment of the high schools, it is not just to assume that high Schools authorities would be easily agreed to run such program which adds extra financial burden to them. Thus, "what is the opinion of the high schools regarding this program?' is the another question whose answer is exigent to prop up letter sender's argument.

Likewise, the sender of this letter unfairly assumes that providing driving training by the high schools would be panacea to control those accidents; however, he seems unable to think that accidents are not the result of single factor. He needs to provide extra warrants why he think provide such training would significantly reduce the accidents, even if there are several other factors which affects to cause accidents.

Finally at the end of the day, the argument seems to be utterly skeptical. Answers of the questions raised above needs to be answer to fortify the argument of the letter sender. In present situation this argument deserves no dice on my behalf.

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Average: 6.2 (1 vote)
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'finally', 'however', 'if', 'likewise', 'may', 'nevertheless', 'really', 'regarding', 'similarly', 'so', 'thus', 'for example']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.244444444444 0.25644967241 95% => OK
Verbs: 0.147474747475 0.15541462614 95% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0969696969697 0.0836205057962 116% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0444444444444 0.0520304965353 85% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0242424242424 0.0272364105082 89% => OK
Prepositions: 0.109090909091 0.125424944231 87% => OK
Participles: 0.040404040404 0.0416121511921 97% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.70507832628 2.79052419416 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.040404040404 0.026700313972 151% => OK
Particles: 0.0040404040404 0.001811407834 223% => OK
Determiners: 0.127272727273 0.113004496875 113% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0161616161616 0.0255425247493 63% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0161616161616 0.0127820249294 126% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2718.0 2731.13054187 100% => OK
No of words: 443.0 446.07635468 99% => OK
Chars per words: 6.13544018059 6.12365571057 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.57801047555 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.417607223476 0.378187486979 110% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.322799097065 0.287650121315 112% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.207674943567 0.208842608468 99% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.117381489842 0.135150697306 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70507832628 2.79052419416 97% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 207.018472906 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496613995485 0.469332199767 106% => OK
Word variations: 56.0410917134 52.1807786196 107% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.039408867 95% => OK
Sentence length: 23.3157894737 23.2022227129 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.274836445 57.7814097925 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.052631579 141.986410481 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3157894737 23.2022227129 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.684210526316 0.724660767414 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 3.58251231527 251% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 55.5956991802 51.9672348444 107% => OK
Elegance: 1.82242990654 1.8405768891 99% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.575774017881 0.441005458295 131% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.148318795823 0.135418324435 110% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0830425881271 0.0829849096947 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.616866106763 0.58762219726 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.171483254934 0.147661913831 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.249087791761 0.193483328276 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.143328988569 0.0970749176394 148% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.408655149067 0.42659136922 96% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.11711632144 0.0774707102158 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.384260097136 0.312017818177 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.139180774222 0.0698173142475 199% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.33743842365 72% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.87684729064 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.82512315271 21% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 4.0 6.46551724138 62% => OK
Negative topic words: 12.0 5.36822660099 224% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.82389162562 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 16.0 14.657635468 109% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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