The following appeared in a memo from the Mayor of the city of Hillview:
“In order to alleviate the serious unemployment problem in our town, we should encourage Autotech to build its automobile manufacturing plant in our area. The Hillview landfill, which has been undeveloped for decades, is a perfect site for this plant. The building and staffing of this plant will put to work thousands of Hillview residents left unemployed after Computech computer software programming company abandoned its national facility last year. I am asking the City Council to authorize a large campaign to attract the company and offer significant tax incentives to make our town attractive to this giant of car manufacturing.”
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In the argument, the author suggests that Autotech should set up their automobile maufacturing plant in the area of Hillview landfill in order to alleviate the unemployment problem of the area. He also suggests the City council to arrange a campaign to attract the company for setting up the plant. However, to properly evaluate this suggestion, three questions must be answered.
Firstly, the author indicates that prior to Autotech, a software programming company had an office in the Hillview landfill. By mentioning this, the author tried to express the potential job efficiency of the indigenous people of the area. However, expertise in a certain field of industry does not necessarily indicate expertise in other areas. People who are good with computers may or may not be good with automobiles and thus leads to a potential fallacy of the argument.
Secondly, nothing about the educational qualifications of the native people is mentioned in the passage. People living in that area might be unemployed due to their lack of education. Before setting up a plant and appointing people for this, the authority must train the people who will be working in the plant. Given that they might be uneducated, it will be a very tedious and time consuming job for the plant authority to teach the basics of automobiles. Moreover, nothing about the training facility is discussed in the passage.
Last of all, there is no mention of why the place is a perfect site for setting up an automobile plant in the area. The area might have some extra advantages which might attract Autotech to build their plant in that particular area but no such mentions have been found. This area might be a remote place where transportation system is very underdeveloped which might be the reason for the departure of Computech. If the transportation system is poor, Autotech will most likely hold them back from setting up a plant in this area irrespective of great tax incentives.
If the author can answer the above mentioned questions properly and show enough evidence regarding these, the argument can be evaluated with proper consideration.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 351 350
No. of Characters: 1737 1500
No. of Different Words: 174 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.328 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.949 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.791 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 121 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.647 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.583 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.328 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.575 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.095 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 17, column 164, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...be evaluated with proper consideration.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1792.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 351.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10541310541 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86769933622 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507122507123 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.2277048496 57.8364921388 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 105.411764706 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6470588235 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41176470588 5.70786347227 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154454595966 0.218282227539 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0541048825063 0.0743258471296 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0720994781023 0.0701772020484 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.087533322934 0.128457276422 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0706238096061 0.0628817314937 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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