The following appeared in a memo from the Mayor of the city of Hillview:"In order to alleviate the serious unemployment problem in our town, we should encourage Autotech to build its automobile manufacturing plant in our area. The Hillview landfill, which

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The following appeared in a memo from the Mayor of the city of Hillview:
"In order to alleviate the serious unemployment problem in our town, we should encourage Autotech to build its automobile manufacturing plant in our area. The Hillview landfill, which has been undeveloped for decades, is a perfect site for this plant. The building and staffing of this plant will put to work thousands of Hillview residents left unemployed after Computech computer software programming company abandoned its national facility last year. I am asking for city council to authorize a large campaign to attract the compan and offer significant tax incentives to make our town attractive to the giant of car manufacturing."

The Mayor has written in his memo that unemployent problem can be abhorred by encouraging Autotech to build its automobile manufacturing plant in the city of Hillview. It is not shown anywhere that residents of Hillview would love to work in the automobile manufacturing plant. Also, the Autotech has not told that they will hire people from the city for its manufacturing plant.

The mayor has said that Hillview landfill has been undeveloped for decades. This might be due to some other reasons. It might happen that residents of Hillview are satisfied with the current status of their city. They don't want to go under any development due to which the city council has not made any developments fo decades. It may also happen that the needs of the people were getting fulfilled by the companies already present in the city.

It has been written that many of the unemployed persons were from the Computech computer software programming company which has abandoned its national facility last year. It tells us that many of the unemployed were from software background not from the automobile background. So, it may happen that people will not qualified to work in an automobile manufacturing plant since the skill set required are completely different. This may lead to the hiring of people from outside the city to work in the automobile manufacturing plant and will leave the residents unemployed as they were before.

The Mayor is asking to authorize a large campaign to attract the company and offer significant ta incentives. Offering tax incentives will surely lure companies to setup their plant in the city but it will also result in the decreasing income for the city. The companies which are already present will also ask for same tax benefits which will further reduce the income for city hindering the development of the city.

I would like to conclude by saying that Mayor should encourage companies which will employ most of the people as large number of residents are from software background. He should encourage software companies to set up their company in the city or offer some benefits to the Computech computer software company to reopen their company in the city which will eventually result in the employment of many residents of Hillview.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 219, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... the current status of their city. They dont want to go under any development due to...
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Line 5, column 172, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ndoned its national facility last year. It tells us that many of the unemployed we...
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Line 5, column 317, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'qualify'
Suggestion: qualify
... So, it may happen that people will not qualified to work in an automobile manufacturing ...
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Line 7, column 162, Rule ID: CAN_SETUP[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to set up'?
Suggestion: to set up
...x incentives will surely lure companies to setup their plant in the city but it will als...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'may', 'so']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.249370277078 0.25644967241 97% => OK
Verbs: 0.188916876574 0.15541462614 122% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0554156171285 0.0836205057962 66% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0453400503778 0.0520304965353 87% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0528967254408 0.0272364105082 194% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.136020151134 0.125424944231 108% => OK
Participles: 0.0554156171285 0.0416121511921 133% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.70793009835 2.79052419416 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0377833753149 0.026700313972 142% => OK
Particles: 0.00251889168766 0.001811407834 139% => OK
Determiners: 0.108312342569 0.113004496875 96% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0478589420655 0.0255425247493 187% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.0176322418136 0.0127820249294 138% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2273.0 2731.13054187 83% => OK
No of words: 378.0 446.07635468 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.01322751323 6.12365571057 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.57801047555 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.328042328042 0.378187486979 87% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.261904761905 0.287650121315 91% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.208994708995 0.208842608468 100% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.140211640212 0.135150697306 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70793009835 2.79052419416 97% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 207.018472906 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.415343915344 0.469332199767 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 42.9868590744 52.1807786196 82% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.039408867 85% => OK
Sentence length: 22.2352941176 23.2022227129 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0612499374 57.7814097925 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.705882353 141.986410481 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2352941176 23.2022227129 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.294117647059 0.724660767414 41% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.58251231527 112% => OK
Readability: 48.4257703081 51.9672348444 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.5350877193 1.8405768891 83% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.579838379433 0.441005458295 131% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.17890809901 0.135418324435 132% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.104067327409 0.0829849096947 125% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.619795578585 0.58762219726 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.148454481377 0.147661913831 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.2689930541 0.193483328276 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121462251056 0.0970749176394 125% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.446818416832 0.42659136922 105% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0298829840065 0.0774707102158 39% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.432946386626 0.312017818177 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0533408356258 0.0698173142475 76% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.33743842365 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.87684729064 58% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.82512315271 104% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 6.46551724138 124% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 5.36822660099 37% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 14.657635468 89% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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