The following appeared in a memo from the owner of a chain of cheese stores located throughout the United States.
"For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both domestic and imported cheeses. Last year, however, all of the five best-selling cheeses at our newest store were domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin. Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. Since our company can reduce expenses by limiting inventory, the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue stocking many of our varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument
The memo asserts that the company should discontinue the stocking their varieties of imported cheeses and focus primarily on domestic cheeses in order to achieve greater profit. To make this argument, the memo assumes that the main causes of being famous on the Wisconsin area for the cheese is being domestic and world magazine report result. I found this argument irrational since it rests on faulty assumptions.
Firstly, the memo gives emphashis on domesrtic cheese over other varietis on the basis of fact that all the best five cheese seller sells domestic cheese from Wisconsin. The autor fails to assumes that they might be sucessful more becauses they sells qaulity cheeses rather than domestic ones, because consummer doesnot cares whether it is domestic or not. The thing they only care about is quality. So, memo would have suggest to improve in quality rather than changing the origin of cheese.
Secondly, the memo considers the world magazine report to give suggestaion. The world might have difefrent psycological consequences than the area company is focusing. Maybe people of that region may have interest on other veriestis of cheeses. It might be also possible that resident of the city are more likely to test the other foreign tastes. So, before making recommendation the memo, the writer should have think from the point of view of the residents.
Thirdly, the memo suggest to reduce the varieties of cheese and focus on domestic one only to make profit by reducing inventory. But the memo fails to address the consequence of surging of domestic cheeses on the cities. If all the stores start to sell domestic ones, the market will be monotonous that also could be harmful to the all of the store including this one. Thus, the ,memo should have consider the consequence of monotonous market.
In conclusion, the argument is based on the faulty assumption that decreasing inventories and increasing domestic cheeses can increase profit. Thus, to strengthen the argument, the writer would have consider the interest of local people, the possible abberation on psycology from the world point of view and thge consequences of monotonous market.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: I found this argument irrational since it rests on faulty assumptions.
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by an adjective
Suggestion: Refer to argument and irrational
Sentence: The autor fails to assumes that they might be sucessful more becauses they sells qaulity cheeses rather than domestic ones, because consummer doesnot cares whether it is domestic or not.
Description: The token to is not usually followed by a verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Suggestion: Refer to to and assumes
Description: A pronoun, personal, nominative, not 3rd person singular is not usually followed by a verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
Suggestion: Refer to they and sells
Description: The fragment doesnot cares whether is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace cares with verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Sentence: So, memo would have suggest to improve in quality rather than changing the origin of cheese.
Description: A verb 'to have', uninflected present tense, infinitive or is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to have and suggest
Sentence: Maybe people of that region may have interest on other veriestis of cheeses.
Description: The fragment Maybe people is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace Maybe with adjective
Sentence: So, before making recommendation the memo, the writer should have think from the point of view of the residents.
Description: A verb 'to have', uninflected present tense, infinitive or is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to have and think
Sentence: Thirdly, the memo suggest to reduce the varieties of cheese and focus on domestic one only to make profit by reducing inventory.
Description: The fragment memo suggest to is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace suggest with verb, past tense
Description: The fragment on domestic one is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace domestic with adverb
Sentence: If all the stores start to sell domestic ones, the market will be monotonous that also could be harmful to the all of the store including this one.
Description: The token the is not usually followed by a determiner/pronoun, pre-quantifier
Suggestion: Refer to the and all
Sentence: Thus, the ,memo should have consider the consequence of monotonous market.
Description: The token the is not usually followed by a comma
Suggestion: Refer to the and ,
Description: A verb 'to have', uninflected present tense, infinitive or is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to have and consider
Sentence: Thus, to strengthen the argument, the writer would have consider the interest of local people, the possible abberation on psycology from the world point of view and thge consequences of monotonous market.
Description: A verb 'to have', uninflected present tense, infinitive or is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to have and consider
Sentence: Firstly, the memo gives emphashis on domesrtic cheese over other varietis on the basis of fact that all the best five cheese seller sells domestic cheese from Wisconsin.
Error: domesrtic Suggestion: domestic
Error: varietis Suggestion: varieties
Error: emphashis Suggestion: emphasis
Sentence: The autor fails to assumes that they might be sucessful more becauses they sells qaulity cheeses rather than domestic ones, because consummer doesnot cares whether it is domestic or not.
Error: autor Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: consummer Suggestion: consumer
Error: becauses Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: doesnot Suggestion: despot
Error: qaulity Suggestion: quality
Error: sucessful Suggestion: successful
Sentence: Secondly, the memo considers the world magazine report to give suggestaion.
Error: suggestaion Suggestion: suggestion
Sentence: The world might have difefrent psycological consequences than the area company is focusing.
Error: difefrent Suggestion: different
Error: psycological Suggestion: psychological
Sentence: Maybe people of that region may have interest on other veriestis of cheeses.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: veriestis Suggestion: varies
Sentence: Thus, to strengthen the argument, the writer would have consider the interest of local people, the possible abberation on psycology from the world point of view and thge consequences of monotonous market.
Error: psycology Suggestion: psychology
Error: thge Suggestion: than
Error: abberation Suggestion: No alternate word
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 13 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 17 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 353 350
No. of Characters: 1774 1500
No. of Different Words: 167 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.335 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.025 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.506 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 133 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 95 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.611 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.536 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.331 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.558 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.063 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 126, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'seller' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'sellers'.
Suggestion: sellers
...s of fact that all the best five cheese seller sells domestic cheese from Wisconsin. T...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 190, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'assume'.
Suggestion: assume
...eese from Wisconsin. The autor fails to assumes that they might be sucessful more becau...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 246, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'sell'
Suggestion: sell
...y might be sucessful more becauses they sells qaulity cheeses rather than domestic on...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 421, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'suggested'.
Suggestion: suggested
...e about is quality. So, memo would have suggest to improve in quality rather than chang...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 421, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggest improving'.
Suggestion: suggest improving
...e about is quality. So, memo would have suggest to improve in quality rather than changing the ori...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 414, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'thought'.
Suggestion: thought
...dation the memo, the writer should have think from the point of view of the residents...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 19, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggest reducing'.
Suggestion: suggest reducing
... of the residents. Thirdly, the memo suggest to reduce the varieties of cheese and focus on do...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 333, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...onous that also could be harmful to the all of the store including this one. Thus, the ,me...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 376, Rule ID: THE_PUNCT[1]
Message: Did you forget something after 'the'?
... of the store including this one. Thus, the ,memo should have consider the consequenc...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 379, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... the store including this one. Thus, the ,memo should have consider the consequenc...
^^
Line 7, column 398, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'considered'.
Suggestion: considered
...g this one. Thus, the ,memo should have consider the consequence of monotonous market. ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 200, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'considered'.
Suggestion: considered
...hen the argument, the writer would have consider the interest of local people, the possi...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, thus, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1823.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 353.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16430594901 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56860696412 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492917847025 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 705.55239521 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.885122256 57.8364921388 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.277777778 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6111111111 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.70786347227 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206999082198 0.218282227539 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0647942310106 0.0743258471296 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514943401848 0.0701772020484 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117732220109 0.128457276422 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0500644095658 0.0628817314937 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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