The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a company that builds shopping malls around the country.
"The surface of a section of Route 101, paved just two years ago by Good Intentions Roadways, is now badly cracked with a number of dangerous potholes. In another part of the state, a section of Route 40, paved by Appian Roadways more than four years ago, is still in good condition. In a demonstration of their continuing commitment to quality, Appian Roadways recently purchased state-of-the-art paving machinery and hired a new quality-control manager. Therefore, I recommend hiring Appian Roadways to construct the access roads for all our new shopping malls. I predict that our Appian access roads will not have to be repaired for at least four years."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In this memo the vice president of a company that builds shopping malls argues that, Route 101 paved by Good Intentions Roadways just couple of years ago is in really bad and weary conditions. On the other hand, Route 40 built by Appian Roadways four years ago is still in really good condition. He also states that Appians have purchased a state-of-art paving machinery and a new quality-control manager. He finally suggests to hire Appians for constructing new roads for their new shopping malls. However the ideas and arguments presented by the vice president are really weak and unconvincing. Hence, should not be considered or accepted without prior research.
First of all, the vice president wrongly compares route 101 to 40. He never mentions the location of both. It is possible that the route 101 is in industrial area, where there is a huge traffic caused by heavy duty vehicles. Also, route 40 can be in a less populated area where hardly huge vehicles pass or only regular cars pass in this area. If, he does not clarifies the location, no decision can be made.
Secondly, the weather of the region should also be accounted while comparing both routes. Maybe, route 101 in the area where heavy rains, storms and hurricanes are too often seen. In this case, the Good Intention roadways can not be accounted for bad conditions of the road. It is possible that the route 40 has not seen extreme weathers. Hence, such information needs to be provided by the author.
Thirdly, the author never mentions what paving machinery is purchased by Appians. The quality of such tools have to be mentioned here. And such tools also need be compared with that of Good Intention Roadway's tools. The author wrongly assumes that hiring a new quality manager will enhance quality of Appian's roads. Maybe, the manager is only expert in management role and not in technical issues. Such, queries need to done before jumping to any results.
Fourthly,the author only talks about one road built by both companies. More data need to be collected about their other projects and current conditions. It is possible that Good Intention's other projects are highly successful and they are highly experienced in this field. Maybe, Appians do not have any other good route built to favor their arguments. So, if the author do not provide such data, his arguments remain inconsiderable.
In sum, the arguments presented by the vice president have so many flaws and lack evidences. Unless and until he provides more convincing arguments or strengthen them by providing reliable evidences, his recommendations should not be accounted. Maybe, more data should be collected for route 101's condition and the area and weather there. The assurance of quality from Appians also should be checked before handing them contracts.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 31 15
No. of Words: 468 350
No. of Characters: 2277 1500
No. of Different Words: 217 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.651 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.865 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.552 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 152 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.097 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.993 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.516 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.256 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.478 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.106 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 479, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ans for constructing new roads for their new shopping malls. However the ideas an...
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Line 1, column 501, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ew roads for their new shopping malls. However the ideas and arguments presented by th...
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Line 5, column 304, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ted area where hardly huge vehicles pass or only regular cars pass in this area. ...
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Line 5, column 362, Rule ID: DOES_X_HAS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'clarify'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: clarify
...cars pass in this area. If, he does not clarifies the location, no decision can be made. ...
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Line 5, column 362, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'clarify'
Suggestion: clarify
...cars pass in this area. If, he does not clarifies the location, no decision can be made. ...
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Line 5, column 411, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the location, no decision can be made. Secondly, the weather of the region shou...
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Line 13, column 421, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[5]
Message: Did you mean 'do'?
Suggestion: do
...technical issues. Such, queries need to done before jumping to any results. Fou...
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Line 17, column 9, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...re jumping to any results. Fourthly,the author only talks about one road built ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, while, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2360.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 467.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05353319058 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63068002991 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 204.123752495 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.488222698073 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 712.8 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 19.7664670659 157% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.3811650825 57.8364921388 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.1290322581 119.503703932 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.064516129 23.324526521 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.64516129032 5.70786347227 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 16.0 4.67664670659 342% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169638700408 0.218282227539 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0445250567515 0.0743258471296 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0758702792967 0.0701772020484 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0878975142134 0.128457276422 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0698715976195 0.0628817314937 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 14.3799401198 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 48.3550499002 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 12.197005988 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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