The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a company that builds shopping malls around the country.
“The surface of a section of Route 101, paved just two years ago by Good Intentions Roadways, is now badly cracked with a number of dangerous potholes. In another part of the state, a section of Route 40, paved by Appian Roadways more than four years ago, is still in good condition. In a demonstration of their continuing commitment to quality, Appian Roadways recently purchased state-of-the-art paving machinery and hired a new quality-control manager. Therefore, I recommend hiring Appian Roadways to construct the access roads for all our new shopping malls. I predict that our Appian access roads will not have to be repaired for at least four years."
The author's argument is seemed to be ridiculous, for not just comparing intersections locating in different places, but hiring a company specialized in road-construction to build shopping malls. The author dose not present any data or evidence to show that the environmental conditions around the two intersections or any credentials proving that Appian Roadways has ability to construct a shopping mall. Thus, the speakers' positions are not tenable.
Firstly, the author begins with an inappropriate comparison between the surface condition of roads in Route 101 and that in Route 40, furthermore, the writer provides information regarding the building time of each one, trying to implicating that, although Route 40 was built earlier than Rout101, it was better than 101 road for its greater quality. Here, however, a plenty of possibilities could easily undermine such deduction. To illustrate, there are no evidence indicating that the traffic volume and most usual vehicle types in those two intersections. If the reason why Rout 101 is that bad is its much higher vehicle volume than that in Route 40, the claim asserting that the difference of conditions in two places results from quality is unsound.
Secondly, another information used by the author to strengthen his point is an appointment of a new quality-control manager and a new kind of machine. While it was understandable to infer that transferring in new techs and management high-grounds is a good sign, other explanations and possibilities could still be existed. A new manager does not represent for a better, in that high-hierarchy employees are not like lower staff, who will face the true business operations on the first day they get the job. those managers have a plethora of things to cope with, leaving limited time for them to understand the business well. Thus, those managers may still be static at their previous job titles' working logic, making them easier to fail to be succeed in a new environment. And, what is more is that, the new machine, instead of moving itself, we should consider the familiarity of their employees' usage of them. Therefore, there are a bunch of holes and obstacles for hiring them to replace the company constructing the Rout 101 on the part of road construction, much less a shopping mall, considering except inhibits.
To sum up, the author absurdly compare the conditions of intersections in two places without citing numerous evidence and data to espouse his own point, and what more unsound is that, he surprisingly hire a road construction team to build a mall, making more uncertainties within the writers' presuppositions.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 5, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
The authors argument is seemed to be ridiculous, fo...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 509, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Those
...ions on the first day they get the job. those managers have a plethora of things to c...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 937, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'bunches'?
Suggestion: bunches
...s usage of them. Therefore, there are a bunch of holes and obstacles for hiring them ...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 201, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'hires'.
Suggestion: hires
...t more unsound is that, he surprisingly hire a road construction team to build a mal...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, thus, well, while, kind of, to sum up, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2225.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 428.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19859813084 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10481844708 2.78398813304 112% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 204.123752495 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572429906542 0.468620217663 122% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.618516251 57.8364921388 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.333333333 119.503703932 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5333333333 23.324526521 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6666666667 5.70786347227 187% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147258452694 0.218282227539 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0438918279334 0.0743258471296 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0474712203948 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0889005943737 0.128457276422 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0425959793462 0.0628817314937 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 14.3799401198 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 98.500998004 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 5, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
The authors argument is seemed to be ridiculous, fo...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 509, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Those
...ions on the first day they get the job. those managers have a plethora of things to c...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 937, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'bunches'?
Suggestion: bunches
...s usage of them. Therefore, there are a bunch of holes and obstacles for hiring them ...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 201, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'hires'.
Suggestion: hires
...t more unsound is that, he surprisingly hire a road construction team to build a mal...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, thus, well, while, kind of, to sum up, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2225.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 428.0 441.139720559 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19859813084 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10481844708 2.78398813304 112% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 204.123752495 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572429906542 0.468620217663 122% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.618516251 57.8364921388 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.333333333 119.503703932 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5333333333 23.324526521 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6666666667 5.70786347227 187% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147258452694 0.218282227539 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0438918279334 0.0743258471296 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0474712203948 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0889005943737 0.128457276422 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0425959793462 0.0628817314937 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 14.3799401198 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 98.500998004 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.